You beacon me
Your beauty so
Magnificent
It's florescent glow
Guides where I need to be
Hoping wishing
Wanting waiting
For something more
Than this existence
That drives me mad
With keen persistence
Love you well
I wish to do
To keep you close
And let you through
To what would seem
To be my heart
That which I wish
That you could startt
A contest entry
- Lookin' for LOVE....(Men only) by Sacrificial Love.
1000 points, ended June 6, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think in general? Improvements?
Comments
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AWW this is so beautiful!! once again, amamzing (DUH)
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Beautiful....
in its brevity...thank you so much for being a part of my contest... xo
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Very beautiful, the rhyming does not go overboard and it has a very good rhythm. The first two lines of the second stanza are good, but i suggest separating the words with commas.
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