there she goes,
here it comes,
stumble, fall against a wall,
the walking anorexic
wait for it!
she's about to collapse,
here it goes,
---she fell--
poor girl,
walking anorexic
down the hall to her bathroom,
she's had nothing to eat but feels she must purge,
wants some water,
but that's in the kitchen.
so there she goes
a walking anorexic,
how many times must she fall against the wall,
how many times must she hit the floor hard,
how many times until she sees she's about to die,
she has to quit walking like this, ..anorexic
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i really don't know..and i don't even know if i like it but i wrote it while i was on here so i'm going to post it and see if i get a feedback..so tell me what you think
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I like it! It really hit home, especially with last night. Close encounter with the OD kind. And yet, I keep going.
It's very true. It also reminds me of the song "There she goes again" by the Velvet Underground, I imagined that dainty tune. -
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i actually dont' think i've ever heard that song but thanks
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Wow
I like your view of this anorexic girl who keeps falling.. You seem to disagree with the anorexia but find it hard to not feel sorrow for this poor girl.. this poem is beautiful!!!!! -
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well since i suffer from it it kinda sucks but it's all good i guess..not that i agree with it but it's hard to disagree...ya know?
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Wow
O my god, i love this poem, i think it's beautiful! I love how you started it: there she goes,
here it comes,
stumble, fall against a wall,
the walking anorexic
it really gets to you straight away.
And the end was just breath-taking, i think.
"how many times must she fall against the wall,
how many times must she hit the floor hard,
how many times until she sees she's about to die,
she has to quit walking like this, ..anorexic"
It's just all so true, really sad actually.
Keep up the good write, your poems kick ass
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thanks
thank you very much!
i was kinda having a rough day when i wrote it!
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I liked it! awesome!
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thanks very much!
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"wait for it!
she's about to collapse,
here it goes,"
i love that
an expectation
you get this picture of her just crashing like a beautiful...beautiful....i dont even know
but this is so good!
keep it up, seriously
<33
L.
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wow thanks all you guy's comments mean alot!!
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