Blithe fluidity
~ ~ ~ ~ Lithe lucidity
Silver arcs shimmer
from flash
~ ~ ~ ~ ~ to splash ! ~ ~
and glimmer
in a glimpse
~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ to grasp
the heart-leap
of Freedom's touch
in the spirit
~ ~ ~ ~ ~ of emotion
in the ocean
~ ~ ~ ~ of their Joy
To turn, turn as
~ ~ a little child
~ ~ ~ ~ ~ to See
~ ~ ~ ~ so free
to Be
and laugh as One
~ ~ ~ to Dance among
the angels of
~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ the Sea ~ ~
Author notes
Written in the Summer of 1996
First gold won on AP, May 1st 2004 (in: http://allpoetry.com/contest/587380 since removed)
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Call me "Oscar", please. It is not pleasant being stretched upon the rack at AP by nuisances and people with blindfolds on by poor old Lyndon. Bye bye.
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LOL, thank you, "Winkler's Warden"
Appreciate the thought, I am stretched a bit too thinly lately 
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Be my friend too?
Hello, dear Moderator, colleague and friend of Lyndon. You are a fine critiquer with a lot to give. You are handicapped in having to solve so many problems. Lyndon would like to have a Moderators' contest and give you gold. I told him that this was quite an unWinkling thing to do and I am sure that you would agree with me. What you did do was thorough and thoroughly interesting. I award you a Commended for your efforts. I admire your intellect and hope to see more of your inspiring writes and literary comments. - from Oscar, The Winkler's Warden.
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Derlighted every time
This poem is being judged now. This poem is indeed, very good.
To use a cliché, it graces this contest - 'tis my belief. I have had my say above. (Although it has not influenced me, the picture of the dolphins is extraordinarily beautiful.)
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Like a view of liquid Heaven, that is how it reads to me this time. Even the small(?) details as the ~~ added a soft feel to your words.
I enjoyed reading it again, 'Laura'
Mari
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This is beautiful Miss Maat. . . . The flow of it is incredible, and I loved how you did the format, with the tildes (~s), and the different colorations. . . I think that it added to the poem very efficiently. . . And the imagery was amazing. . . I could see the dolphins moving. . . Or maybe it was the picture
shrugs Either way. . . This poem was powerful and amazing
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superb
picturely perfect I see this to be
in the image of the master in the salt of an eye
of the poet and the sun as the image in one
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Thank you, Rod! But, erm, who's Laura?
~Gennelle
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Laura, this is such a joyous statement of Being! In thinking of the myriad ways in which Life so joyously blooms I haven't (at least recently) consider the wondrous lives of dolphins. True Child at play! Thank you for this finger pointing to the moon!
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Lyndon wants me to read it again...
Now see I was disappointed, I've been watching that "Dancing with the stars" and had a totally different vision from Lyndon. I saw them in coattails dancing with that long legged Stacy Kiebler...
Without going too far, the symbol of the dolphin of course (here, I believe) is just a personification for all of us, that urge to be happy, free, and yeah, I'm sure for you that also takes a spiritual turn. Looking at it with just two dimentional vision, it's a lovely image of a beautiful creature much akin to man.
People are so lazy...bet they don't click on the link.
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Excellent poem
Lyndon on Feb 24, 12:05
This poem is a work of jubilation., I am so surprised that no one has seen the association with the spiritual. The dolphin, in antiquity, was seen as a good spirit; the sea sailor's friend. When the early Christian churches in the Mediterranean began to flourish, the dolphin was used as the symbolic Christ figure. It was even a secret revelation of Christian identity. Gerard Manley Hopkins plays with the root word in Dauphin. Of course, the Jesuit gets a double play with the word.
The Dolphin Dancing works very well on the level you have all taken Gennelle's poem. It is charming in the very best kind of poetic way. However, there are real attachments to "the Lord of the Dance" in this poem. The plurality of dolphins becomes the churches or followers or even angels, perhaps saints. All followers were saints in the early days of the churches. Harmony reflects the happiness in possessing the Light of Christ. The streamlined leap and splash reflects Christ's strength, beauty and saving power.
Whether Gennelle meant this or not does not matter. I evaluate the poem; not the author. I fear it bears all of the meanings I have given and yet it is such a delicate, unpretentious , light little poem. Strength in meekness, perhaps.
As to the texture of the poem, I loved the innovative use of tildes to show dolphins at play in the bow wave of a boat. A common but remarkable sight. Gennelle has used the keyboard for a "concrete" representation very effectively, I would have thought.
The introduction begins with wonderful echoic vowel interplay. I love the rhymes which pop up naturally for poetic effect and not ornamentation. Alliteration and sibilance are likewise effective. Notice the liquid "gl" sound, well-known to skilled poets.
The spacing is chosen wisely for an atmosphere of spaciousness.
Altogether, this is a remarkable poem. I commend it to all who have critiqued it, to read it again. Ron -
This is such a beautiful dolphin poem. I could picture in my mind the dolphins doing everthing you explained. It is just beautiful. Keep up the awesome poetry!!!
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Wow
Wow...this piece is absolutely gorgeous. I love the layout you have used and the picture is also very beautiful. Truly an amazing tribute to these gorgeous animals. Good luck in my contest and thank you for entering.
Keep writing
Countrybabe
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Thank you, MG! Are you low on points too? I have plenty if you need some (applauds only cost 3 points each)
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Excellent tribute to such amazing creatures!!
Exquisite I love dophins they are the mystics, joyful tricksters of the sea Beautifully graceful you have capture and given tribute to these wonderful creatures Brava!! Alas, I am out of applause and this beautifully crafted tribute is so deserving
Wishing you much success in all of your endeavors
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Miraculous
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I love this, it feels as though you are jumping in and out of the water with the dolphin, as though the waves are carrying you away ... wonderfully written, thanks for sharing
take care
sanity
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Thank you, Lionheart! Glad you liked it.
~G
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Beautifully written and like the formatting to go with the pic. I liked thia part{to Dance among the angels of ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ the Sea ~ ~)
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Really? And where would that "there" be, I wonder.
~G
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i likr dolphins and all but this is a bit out there...but pretty
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Thanks Col! Glad you liked it
~G
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yes definetly a dreamy poem love the use of ~~~~ for the the wave s this really enhanced the "fluidity " of the piece lovely ~ col
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Thank you Angel! What a poetic soul you are, that is delightful!
I just love playing boomerangs with applause.
~ G
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Tis thee I've been dancing romancing
Within the angels of the sea
Beckoning to us as we
To be forever one sailing free
In dolphins smiles beguile thee
Within your seven swirling seas
O dancing freely eternally
Within dolphins dreams
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Well done
I think this poem demonstrates the joy and freedom of these beautiful creatures. Angels of the sea is a great way to describe them, for they seem to be more than animals. I don't like to see them in captivity, it is sad to me. Wonderful evocative writing, it jumps!
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Thank you for your great comment and applause. Yeah, I used the capitalization of certain words to indicate a more profound meaning long before I ever read anything by Emily Dickinson. It was nice to discover I was in such good company.
~ G
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Lovely
Very good write. The rhythm was so wave-like and playful, it was just like a dolphin. You have a very good vocabulary and used it to add a sort of lithe quality to your piece. The capitalization in the middle of sentences kinda bugged me but I do grasp the maningfulness of it. I liked the last line best, you drew it to a close beautifully and on a happy note, ending with a flourish.
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aww nice pic and a great poem!thanx a lot for sharing thos great piece of work
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Maatkara~
Thank you so much for entering our contest~
We look forward to reading your awesome entry
An emergency had come up so we apologize
And appreciate your patience completely
Great job on this piece~ Best wishes to you in the contest
We will be judging this on Friday~
and much love~Desire and Mini-Desire
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Let's go swimming with the dolphins!
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beauitfully written
this is beauitfully written i want too see more poems fom you I like your style -
Dreamy
You're concise! But I love how you used so few words but painted a beautiful picture...you're more a painter than a poet, but many poets are painters! Keep going the limit.. there was some sparkling imagery in this piece...the ocean is one of my favourite places to be.. and your poem explains why! -
This is a dream poem! A beautiful imagery came to my eyes while reading this write of yours! The sight and sound of dolphins are just wonderful!
Mari
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This was a very beautiful poem. I love dolphins and I could imagine them jumping about and playing in the water. I have not ever actually had the pleasure of seeing this up close but I did see them from a condo once in Florida out in the ocean and it was an amazing site with all the glimmering water around them. Dolphins do seem to be happy playful little creature.
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Excellent
Oh I love the word play! The imagery is lovely and the words you've choosen, the way they dance and trip on the tongue adds beautifully to your poem. Excellent work!
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Excellent work , thanks for sharing !!!!
Thank you I love your wonderful "Dolphin Dancing" !!! A beautiful ballet !!! APPLAUSE !!!!!! Absolutely wonderful imagery >>
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Thank you, Acounselor! so glad it touched the right spot; that was the 'porpoise', after all
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I have see the dolphins race and jump along boats I have been it. You captured the sheer joy they are expressing with vigor. Again, your style is envious, entertaining and thought provoking. This is a remarkable piece. You have taken me from the gloom of a rainy day and transported me to my summer memories with dancing dolphins.
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