Against the moon, large and beautiful
You looked so good, so handsome
Then I saw her, when it was supposed to be me
You’re arms outstretched to enfold her
And as the two of you embraced
Your lips meeting, my eyes began to tear
Each teardrop running slowly down my cheeks
As I wept silently then turned away
Alone in my desolation I cried away all my tears
Those tears turning to rage, anger exploding
My thoughts no longer seemed my own
But those of another, a monster inside me
This stranger plotted, dreaming of revenge
If I can’t have you no one else shall either
You paid dearly for this betrayal
And I laugh as you lay cold in your grave
Dee Garner
June 5, 2008
For Partners In Crime contest
Author notes
Thank goodness I've never felt this way... who knows where I'd be now if I did... don't crimes of passion get special consideration with the courts, though
In a list
A contest entry
- Crime of Passion by Poetic Tasha by Partners In Crime.
450 points, ended June 13, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow!
Now all we need is Betty Davis! Have a happy Summer way down there in Arizona land.
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whoa!! now this sheds a different light on the "I'll get you back" routine. Here's hoping the chancers see your words, it'll make them think twice about whether the grass is greener or not. Best of luck in the contest, and the parole pass too when you win.
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yikes if those thoughts were real!!!
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OOOOO a very fatal attraction piece
One that I think "ALL" courts should give special consideration too!!!
Wow, you have manage to grab a hold of the reader and give that eerie feeling of "Don't mess with my heart"
Even though I know this is wayyyyyyyy not you.. since when are women devious?
An excellent piece of poetry you have penned!
Brilliant!
All my best to you in the contest!
Linda
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Great story. i get the image of a stocker in my mind, maybe she's an ex girlfriend. or maybe shes the current one and he cheated. i like the stocker one better, picturing her watching from the bushes, so i'm gunna go with that one, k? k. id love to see you expand on this later!
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I've felt that way, lol But not in a "I'll plot to do it!" kind of way, I'm nutty, not crazy.
Often sadness is close to anger, I've had moments where that has shifted, a little scary actually. Yeah I know, "Lazy Yem get angry?" It doesn't happen much, lol
Sadly, for some folk this is their Modus operandi...some folk are really scary, like that odd Peterson guy.
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Conversely, when there is no passion, it is crime also or at least it should be because your love has been locked up by complacentcy and loneliness. I can certainly see the logic in your message. Best of luck in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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Nothing like beating a head in with a hammer to
make one feel better...hehe
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oh Dee you really are a criminal well bring it on i say. This is awesome.
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Wow
I never knew you had a such a devious criminal mind...much better then your sister's poem...are you sure the two of you are related...
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oooh nicely put
good luck
Tasha
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Wow, i hope i never make you mad Excellent poem Good luck in the contest
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