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with poise to rest in blue

 

 

 

 

 
she will never walk
seasons.
 
their feet find her instead,
a settled weight
to fall
 
through soft-soil days.
 
 
an ambience of layered
earth,
made round by all the green
she holds
 
in gentle unshaped
fearless art,
 
in whispered rain.  

 

 

a kite that lacks all need
to lean against the wind-
 
 
 
she floats within

 

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such stillness.
 
 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
    June 16

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    Beautiful delivering of subtle qualities in grace.

    Congratulations and well deserved 'Gold'.

    Sol



  • Rowan gold member
    June 16

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    So deserving. This has such a quite grace about it, loved the kite imagery. Just beautiful, kate.


  • transcendental baby gold member
    June 7

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    You're a dreamer of beautiful things too ... and you've captured here the the sensation of lighter-than-air grace and movement and brought it back down to us earth-bound creatures. I could almost feel myself rising and floating on this thermal of rhythm and image


  • Dalaney gold member
    June 6

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    I agree with all below me - you have a distinct style all of your own, a mastery of words that is spellbinding. Grace? Yes, you have captured it quite well, I think, both in poetry and in life Love, Lane


  • Nicolette gold member
    June 6

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    This is utterly beautiful and graceful, Kate. I so love this poem. Even the layout seems to add to the gentle, flowing sensation this poem leaves the reader with.

    The image of the kite just made itself sit in my eyes as that is indeed one of the most graceful thing one can feast one's eyes on. Loved the quietude here too; the sense of inner-harmony that seems to rise from your words, just like the kite. Wonderful poetry.

    Thank you for the entry.

    ~ Nicolette


  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    June 6

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    This does speak of grace beautifully. I'm afraid as a kite I tend to seek the wind too impatiently and end up crashing and burning into the dirt and grass below.

    Thing is, though I love to roll downhill in the grass, so it still works for me. Clumsy grace?






  • Faithbound gold member
    June 5

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    Simply stunning. This is beautiful.


  • ardentMarch gold member
    June 5

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    this is grace....I love this, Kate...excellent, the layout of the poem, it has this inner feeling of floating gracefully like the kite, perfect metaphor for this contest..and so creative...

    "a kite that lacks all need
    to lean against the wind-



    she floats within



    -


    such stillness."

    love it

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