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White Lie

Rusty needles open sores

Perspiration dripping no one scores

 

Hanging flesh pushing bones

Memory lost vacant stones

 

Distant haze lifetime fee

Deceptions born heroins key

 

Taken sanity taken soul

Blackness creeping deepening hole

 

Another hit another dream

Reality's just a bloody scream

 

Given wings no sky

Broken images cant fly

 

Increased load forbidden flight

Destiny's ceiling final height

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Adios Muchachos gold member
    June 15

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    Dear TAI

    Nice you said something about a terrible addiction like heroin. Two of my friends died from it when I was a youngster.
    Curious! Aren't bartenders a loquacious bunch? Yet many of the poems I see listed are short. I'll take a peek further later when I return.
    Again, nice poem, deadly subject!

    John-Las Vegas, Nevada USA


  • Rose of Ireland gold member
    June 14

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    Brilliant!!!

    This is a winner, a first class masterpiece!!!


  • AutumnsFlame
    June 6

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    This was very poetic and nicely put, yet in some places the rhyme seemed a bit forced... it was still good though.

  • xxxStrifyxxx
    June 5
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    Very beautiful! You're really good with sight words!

    • tainfinite gold member
      June 5
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      taiinfinite

      thankyou for your comment, i hope to get this to a tune on my gat if i ever get the time, and come up with a chorus
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