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He Changed My Life

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To never hold him in my arms
or feel his warm and tender charms
my beating heart his voice soon calms.
He changed my life

To drown within his deep brown eyes
to make him real and win my prize
to hear his soft and sensual sighs
That changed my life

With words he wrote right from the start
I knew that he would never part
his poetry had won my heart.
It changed my life

This man touched me in many ways
his messages that filled my days
with new ideas my mind ablaze.
They changed my life

No man touched me this way before
he had me hooked, I knew the score
his thoughts devoured my very core
He is my life

 

 

 


 

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PROMPT:

I’ve never had the pleasure of looking into his/her eyes or holding his/her in my arms and yet he's/she’s touched me like I’ve never been touched before.

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  • K-9
    June 13, 2008

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    I liked the cadence of this piece. Your three line rhymes (hence the "Triplets" list, I assume) were a fresh approach. I also liked the progression of the fourth line in each stanza. I enjoyed reading this!
    ~woof


  • Touchof1der silver member
    June 12, 2008

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    Well... no unveiling as to who this inspiring individual is? Leaving us all woven into the mysterious ways this person has profoundly touched you is a nice touch to the whole context and aura of the poem. I like that. But shame on you for not sharing!! Best wishes to you in all of your endeavors and thank you for sharing. Keep that pen handy and ever ready for use dear poet. Good luck in the contest!
    ♥ Touchof1der


  • cricketjeff gold member
    June 7, 2008

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    A lovely triplet in "sapphic" meter (8 8 8 4 syllable iambics). The content is loving and wistful and he (or she ) is a very lucky man (or woman, yeah right!) and I bet he (or she ) wishes they had had the pleasure I have of actually having met you.


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    June 5, 2008
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    Well . we are waiting,,never known you reserved..xxx