the end is a new beginning
like the tide it rolls
cleansing tattered souls
from a darkened underpinning
the finish finds the start
the circle comes complete
advancing in retreat
to reset a bleeding heart
life's a journey that you take upon the course
the twists and turns direction, leading to the source
trip and fall to find the path's not always known
with every step to take, the fragile heart is sown
from hate emerges love
emotions grinding
fear unwinding
the serpent yields to dove
the night reveals the day
sins forgiving
the price for living
as lovers set upon there way
life's a journey that you take upon the course
the twists and turns reflection gathering remorse
trip and fall to find the path,s not always known
with every step to take, the fragile heart has grown
A contest entry
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Comments
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this was great. good use of emotion
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This surely is an intense poem ! I loved it. It fit the quote pretty good. I know how hard it is to try and find a prewrite that fits the prompt, but you did pretty great with it, I think. Spelling error: "sown" should be "sewn" and then on the second to last line, is the "s" supposed to be there? And only one more ! haha :] "as lovers set upon there way"..."there" should be "their", because it's possesive. I don't mean to point out all the flaws in this poem, but correcting those few errors would make it flow smoother =) All in all, this poem was great. I loved the rhyming every now and then. You have a definite way with words. Thanks for entering our contest & I wish you the best of luck ! ♥
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Thank you for your beautifully penned entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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so beautiful
i loved this....so strong....so peaceful....so...perfect
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A lovely piece, expressing perfect balance and rhyme, I am a lover of good rhyme. Wonderful! Thank you for your fine entry in the contest
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What lovely twists and turns you have here, like life.
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Very nice indeed, nice flow and rhyme with a good chorus. Thank you for the fine entry in the contest.
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