I live in a tower up in da sky
Mommy calls me princess whenever I cry
Today I made a new friend who shares
He’s name is Ethan and he lives down stairs
This house has special magic to me
We even lock the door with a golden key
Anny
Author notes
We moved to a place on the first floor about a week ago. Aneka was so excited and loved the place from the very first time she laid eyes on it.
The golden key is actually a Brass "police man". A little piece that fits into the keyhole for security. As you take it out the door it is attached to the key.
Whenever I help Aneka to "write" her poems, I will sit down with her [4 years old] and ask her to draw a picture. From there I ask for the first line, followed by "Matching words" - we say that for rhyming, and then the second line usually follows.
Believe me it takes a while and sometimes I crack myself laughing with the things she can come up with.
Thanks for reading
Aneka & Rebekah-Ann
In a list
A contest entry
- This Contest is Fixed! by Amera.
1000 points, ended June 6, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is so cute! For a four year old this is amazing! It is so great to have wonderful poets at such a young age. Keep on writing. Great job on this beautiful and sweet poem!
~ Bright Smyles
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That is special...its so cute that you sit with your four year old and help them write poetry. exercising the creative mind at a young age. she will be a master in no time... Very adorable and the background fits nicely...its also very cute
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This is sweet, that's all I can say.
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Wow, this is amazing for one so young. I love how you expressed your love for your new house. I am sure that you will grow up to be a great poet one day. To the mother: It is such a wonderful thing you are nuturing Anny's love for poetry at such a young age! Great poem and congratulations on the gold!
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You are from South Africa, Anny? I am too
Wow, this is just great for a 4 year old girl - so very cute and adorable and quite amazing! Keep on writing, little one.
~ Nicolette
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Shocking and Promising
To start with, any piece of writing is special seeing as it has a certain sentimental value to whoever wrote it! It follows that this specific piece of writing was written by a four year old and is actually quite genious if u look at it from a certain point of view. First it displays a child's innocent view of a carefree world. On a deeper basis, this poem represents a person's sanctuary or sanctum which to him/her is usually sacred and perfect, and according to the way this "castle" is described it seems to be immacualate containing all what the young writer seems to want at this point in her life. This is evident to an extent that she believes it deserves being locked using a "gold key".
From a more philosophical point of view, the "castle" represents "Utopia" an early Platonic theory and vision which incinuates living in a perfect flawless world.
I am compelled to believe that the child who has written this beautiful poem is a genious and will grow up to be a Great poet.
Truly Breathtaking!!!
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Amazing
Very innocent poetry.... Indeed, beautifully written...
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Like a perfect little dream.
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AWWWWWWW
this is so cute and it really shows how children see the world different then us. what happened to us? i guess as we get older, we see the world in a omore boring, less miraculous way. i think that its great that shes so young but is already writing. i look forward to reading more of your poems, keep uo the good work.
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Wow!
I work with children aged 5 to 10 daily. Few of them can match this. I like the way you go about it and give you lots of credit for sitting down with Aneka and encouraging her this way. She will remember that time with you. You are giving her a wonderful ability that will help as she gets older.
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that's sooo adorable! i love that you write poetry with your daughter, i think it's wonderful
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Aww..
This is cute
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i like it b/c it's happy.
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This is an amazing write, filled with imagination and heartwarming thoughts. Great job Aneka! You are going to be a wonderful writer someday, you already are!
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the fact that a child of four years wrote this is so heartwarming. nice little fairytale
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CUTE
Congratulations Aneka on your eggcelent little poem, and I am soo proud of you for learning to pen at the ripe ole age of four! I have a six year old grandaughter named, TORI LYNN, she also writes poetry!
YOU GO GIRLFRIEND!!!!!!
POETDONTKNOWIT
WRITING IT HER WAY
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very well done
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Aneka, I love this poem for it makes me feel that you are safe and happy here in your new home. I am happy that you are doing so well and I am giving you three clappies for this great job that you have done here.
Keep up the great work, sweetie and you will go far in everything you do. 
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beautiful!!! we have to be a child in order to think of the most extravagant philosophic lines... simple and beautiful
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I am so glad
that this darling little child won this contest. Her poem was cherishable, i can only imagine how awsome she will be when time flows by.
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charming !!!
...ah for years old ! a lovely time of life!
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wow
that is good and even if it was fixed you should have won keep her writing is's a great gift to give ur child -
So sweet!!!
Hey this is really a very sweet poem dear princess!!
I loved it!! I read it to my sister and she also loved it so much. This is so sweet that a four year old can express her feelings in such a lovely way. God Bless you and ur mum
-Neha
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Ah! ANEKA!
What a shiny Trophy! YAY! Your poem is so pretty ... Please draw me that Castle in the Sky ... and Aneka Princess and Queen Mommy ... and Prince Ethan!
Please, please, please ...
Here, Rose Princess, roses for you and your Mommy Becks:
COUNT THEM!
And: a candle kiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiss!
Love
Myra
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I can't wait to watch you grow up on AP. You are so creative already. Very cute poem. Glad you like your new home.
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My sweet little girl!!!
You are my princess and Mommy think that you deserve a great big soft serve Ice cream for the lovely poem you wrote! I am so glad you are happy! That makes my heart so warm inside.
You are so special to me!
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This poem is so wonderful. I could just see your beautiful castle! All the best sweetheart!!
Crystal
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This is really cute..hope you have fun n your new castle... All the best in the contest dear...
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I love it
A sweet wonderful poem. Great job on it.
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I love your poem, Aneka! What great rhyme!
I wish we could see your drawings. I bet they are wonderful! Does your Mommy hang your picture and poems on the refrigerator?
stars for you!
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behind the door we have a notice bord with my art.
Thanks for my stars! I can play twinkle twinkle little star on my piano.
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Aneka! this was soo cute and i loved the magical feel you pieced together! you are a great writer and will only get better as you get older!!! good luck to you sweety!!!
rianna
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oh my! good job hun keep up the good work
xoxo -christina
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Hello Anny
My name is Buddy or (Pure Thought) here. I really think you are a good poet. This poem has good rhyme.
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I live in a tower up in da sky - there is my life a good piece of poetry which flows smoothly along the smiles in life.
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Aneka! I love your poem! I hope you and Ethan can play and have fun together in your new home. Maybe you can show him your special key.
Paul
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Yay very cute!!!
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That is so cute! I hope you have fun in your castle, you're a princess of words!
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I hope you win
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Well Done & Good Luck
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Great job sweetie!! Keep on writing!!!!!!!! I it
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Hi Poetess,
I waited until I was fifty one years old to start writing poetry, I’m glad you started early.
Your poem has a great first line; I instantly pictured the view from “your castle in the sky”
I hope you enjoy your writing
Regards, Peter
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Very good write
This is interesting and in your notes it sounds like you are having a great time .
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this is a great poem its really cute, as you are too, wonderful imagination, keep up the great writing ~Amy& nathan8
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Anny, Do you know that you are really a princess to your mommy. That is a wonderful metaphor! (Ask your mommy to tell you what I mean.) Is Ethan as magical as you are? MAybe some day he will be you prince and rescue you from stepping in a big puddle.your rhyme is so cute. I loved every word of this precious poem. Best wishes in this contest!
Love and
Linda
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An interesting contradiction you put in your lovely rhyming poem. "sky" vs "downstairs" It is wonderful you already add some hidden meanings into your poem. I forsee the birth of a wonderful poetress!
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awwesome with more clappies
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great
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wonderful job my dear, much clappies
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Oh, this is absolutely wonderful. I miss those days, those lazy, fun-filled days of childhood. Where every little thing was so full of magic and beautiful mystery. The poem itself is very sweet, and pretty well written. Congratulations, Anny, you have an awesome mother who is opening your eyes to the excitement of writing. Listen to her, and keep putting effort into finding those "matching" words, for, though you may not become a poet, the joys of the poetry that was mingled with your childhood will stay with you long after you have become a "grown-up." Thank you both for taking me to your "castle in da sky."
Air
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wonderful job hunny
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Oh how adorable... She may never grow up to be a poet but the value of learning to use language is immeasurable... And she is a budding talent for sure...!!!
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Hi Honey,
What a beautiful read this one is! Just what I needed today! Thanks! You really did a great job on this one!!
and love
Nyetta
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Only a child can come out with something so pure and innocent. A wonderful daughter you must have. She seems to love to learn new things. I wish you the best of luck.
~Kystal Angel
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You are a vey clever poet who deserves lots of clappies,, Ros
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This is wonderful, I absolutely love this poem.. great job.
lots ofs for you
kat
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This has to be the sweetest thing ever!!! What a wonderful job this little girl did..... I am taking up this idea with my daughter when she is a bit older too!! Wonderful wonderful wonderful job....
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aww this is a very nice Good luck with it in the contest Your very talented for 4
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Wow. This was awesome.
I love the part about the key.
Well done.
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Yeah Aneka!
This is wonderful I am so happy to see another of your writes I give you every Clappy available in the hole unicerse and outter space and every clappy in heaven!!!! I think that should count for more clappies then anyone
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Aww this is very very sweet. Good poem!
Illuminated *KT*
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Bunnies for you
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Woooo Hoooo... So precious this is.
Delila
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Very well done! She deserves the following clappies.....and more!
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perfectly precious!
well done sweety
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Awwwwwwwwwwww This is very sweet
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Wonderful
Awww, this is so terrific and very touching. Best of luck in the contest.
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What a sweet and charming poem! I love it! Best to you in the contest!
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Awww this is just the sweetest thing.. and I bet you are a precious princess!! How wonderful to have a special golden key!! I would love one of those...
And new friends are always good aren't they?
I think this is just a beautiful and adorable poem!!
Bigssss for you!!
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so sweet for somaone at such a young age really cool i hope you win
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This is the best poem I ever read!
Are you sure you're only 4?
blessings,
extasy
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the cutest thing i have ever read!
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4 years old and writing such fun, delightful stuff (with mom's wonderful help of course) - imagine what she will do as she matures! I love this, it's full of innocence and imagery as only a child can see the world!
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;-) Sweet
Dit is pragtig my Skat, moet sê het die gediggie geniet. Julle het seker lekker gespeel toe sy dit
uitgedink het en jy dit aanmekaar moes lap!!!
This is the winner Almera no doubt about it, right?
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awwww this is soo sweet
good luck in the contest sweetie
and take care
stephanie
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This should win. It has the innocence of a child all over it. I envisaged a wide-eyed little girl taking her first steps, in writing.
Opening up her imagination. Such a wondrous thing to be a child again. We all must strive to keep that innocence. It is a beautiful poem. Full of imagery. And it made this dark writer smile. Well done, honey. Keep writing and never stop.
Wayne Leon
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If this poem does not win, I expect this contest really is fixed! Great job! Here's three bunnies for writing such a great poem.
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A wonderful little poem about where you have moved too and I have never had a golden key before, you're very lucky.
Here's a big hug just for you
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This is such a cute write! You are so young but so talented! Keep up the amazing writing and enjoy your new home Theresa
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Bravo
I love it
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a special castle in the sky, a friend who shares with me...whispers, we even lock the door with a golden key~
what a wonderful picture you have penned with magic words and tenderness~
niaish so much little one for sharing it with me~
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great stuff
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THIS IS TOO SPECIAL,
LITTLE POETESS.
LOVELY SWEETNESS
GOD BLESS...
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i love this its so cute
have fun in your new home Anny
x cheeky x
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very nice
The best thing one can do is to encourage others to find their own words. That might poetry or stories or many other things, but when they find what they love, it make you feel the best ever! The Shaker
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A cute write, with a charming flow
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This is so charming
Your skill is alarming
And you are disarming
I love what you write
You really are clever
Keep writing forever
You will find that I never
Don't like what you write
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keep on matching words
draw some pretty birds
Have a lovely time
Write a lot of rhyme
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Really pretty.
This sounds just like what a child would feel about an apartment on an upper floor. A castle yes indeed to her that is what it must feel like. Aneka you are lucky to have found a friend to share with you. You sound like a very interesting and lovable little girl, your mom is lucky to have you in her life. Your poem is very pretty and I really liked it.
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ahh - this is completely amazing. Yo must really love your new house. You've done some really excellent work!
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omggg this is sooo adorable sis your a teacher your a mommy ur a baby sitter ur everything your one sis that noo one can ever replace loveee what you do and ANEKA your just simply ADORABLEEE
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Yay! I love your poetry! You open your heart and tell be about your self. This poem is excellent.
Love,
Amera♥
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This is really sweet. It is sure to bring a smile to any that stops by. Lovely
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Wow This is really Good !
For such a short and sweet poem this all brings a smile on my face to know that you do all of this with her by your side even.I really love it all but this phrase sticks out at me and to me ! ( This house has special magic to me, We even lock the door with a golden key ) This is so special and out of the eye's of a Babe. Good Luck in The Contest ! ~~~~~~~ Brenda Gae ~~~~~~~
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This is awesome. It looks so deceptingly simple but it is profound. And for Aneka's age, this deserves congratulation. She's cut for a bright future as a poet. Thanks for the collaborators, the simplicity was not compromised with adult-speak.
Luv u Aneka.
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Anny
What a lovely, imaginative poem! You know, I have never had a golden key. Brass ones; but never golden!
I could never have written rhymed couplets like this when I was staying in a house on a hill when I was very ill!
Tell Becks that I say 'hello' to her, too. 
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She doesn't think Brass is any different to gold
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