Sit to see the beauty
Of the things that pass you by
Sit and look around you
And see what you never tried
Sit to remember what,
What could have, should have been
Sit and just to think about
What you never dared to begin.
Sit and talk or think alone
Of what you could have done
Sit to reminisce the past
And see youve been outrun
Sit to think and realize
What you never could seem to do
Sit and look back at the memories
Which will forever haunt you
A contest entry
- Your best work (Quickie). by jocelynclaire.
300 points, ended June 9, 2008, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
hard to understand? let me know =D
Comments
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It was a tad bit confusing
I was confused at first.
But then I read it a second time and understood. It is about the things that you could have done. The things that you should have done, but you didn't. And some of those things could be let go easily. But, the ones that hit a chord in your sensitivity are the ones you regret the most. Right?
I liked it.
The rhymes were well choses along with the visualizations you describe. I noticed that you repeated the word "sit" a few times.
That kind of tells the reader that you have to THINK about the things that you did. Like a journey. Not a physical journey, but a mental journey.
I really liked it.
Great write.
~Suri
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Explination
This poem is about regret in not doing something that you should have done. Lets see how many of you can come up with events in your past which you should have taken part of, but ended up not doing so. Give me a verdict, and share your story =]
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