Fallen angel
Dropped from the sky
You don't know how and you don't know why.
Can't ask them any question
'Cause they don't tell the truth.
You choose to hide away your fears
And discard your broken youth
But you're always left to wonder
If there's someone out there
Who hasn't got a shattered heart
And just might care, about your frozen teardrops
And the wings that can't fly
'Cause they broke beneath your fall
The day you fell from the sky...
Broken angel
With tattered dreams
I wish that I could hold you close
So you'd know it's not all that it seems
'Cause there's a big world out there
And it's full of light
Just waiting for you
To escape the night.
So gather your courage
And hold close your heart.
Forget the past behind
And make a brand new start.
I can see you in my minds eye
Soaring high above the earth
Come on my broken angel
And show them what you're worth
You can fix those wings up again
If only you would try
'Cause I've seen the strength within you
I know that you can fly.
Escape the lonely life
And the troubles darkness brings
Lift your eyes up on high
And flap those virgin wings
Broken angel .... Broken angel...
You fell from the sky....
Fallen angel....
I know that you can try....
Take your soul into your hands
And look down deep inside
Find the little girl that you're so desperate to hide.
Save her from the scars of the past
Don't hide her anymore...
At last, now broken agnel
Let yourself begin to soar...
Broken angel ... You're not her anymore...
Broken angel ... my broken angel...
(c) Symphony
21st May 2007
Author notes
This is about coming out of something a winner. This poem was written when I was in the depths of despair during a deep depression, and since then, has become my 'motto' poem - because I'm the girl I'm talking about in it; the broken, fallen angel who wants to recover but is afraid to, who is tempted by the temptation of leaving this world and all its unbearable obstacles behind - and since writing this, I have recovered from depression, AND come off my medication, which is the largest victory I could have hoped for. I hope you will all understand how personal this is to me. x3 Symphony
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A contest entry
- Walking Away A Winner Several Choices by CountryCousin.
1000 points, ended June 30, 2008, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Tolerance and Child Abuse Prevention: Group Members ONLY by Page Shut down.
1200 points, ended October 27, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Never Give Up (1000 Points) Lots of HMs by sOuL.
750 points, ended December 14, 2008, 43 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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this was an amazing poem!! thank you so much for entering.... good luck!
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That really relates to me. This is an incredible poem i love it!
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a great poem and thanks for entering my contest
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thank you, I am glad that you liked it
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a wonderful poem with powerful emotions and a vivid depth of sadness and it take alot to find courage to move forward in life when our childhood has been destroyed and bravo for your courage thank you for entering the contest congratulations on your shiny and good luck in the contest
maralisa
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thank you so much for your lovely comment; although this was written in the hardest time of my life [which, compared to the lives of others, was miraculously short] - i've had a few people come to me with messages that it has helped them, as they have identified with it- which i guess, is the greatest honour a poet can ask for
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thank you
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I put a warning in my contest that I am a harsh judge and will tell my TRUE opinion... Here's what I think:
There is only one HUUGGGEEE problem I have with this and that is the cliche theme. I cannot tell you how many times I have seen the title "Broken Angel" on a poem. The whole fallen angel/broken angel thing has been done over and over again. I feel like I've read this poem before. I think you could be a good writer if you could come up with some more creative themes. Thank you for entering my contest, but this poem is not right for it. -
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you possibly have read it before, as it's been posted around the internet quite a bit [by me]
no worries on your comments; i do know that it is a cliched theme but, as i said, it depicts me at my lowest - and working towards getting better so, to me, it's my motto poem
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So full of pain and despair.
I really do not know what to say about this one. It is so sad and I can really feel all your hurt. I know how you feel, I have felt the same. I know when you feel this way you think no one else could possibly have felt this bad and that you have allways felt this way. You can't remember any time you felt any different. I know how it feels to be afraid to get better, becuase no matter how bad you feel you are used to it and so afraid to move. I know it can take years. I too got off my medication and am much btter now. Well I am waffling on here. Very good poem. It really moved me; almost to tears. -
gosh powerfull, and very emotional piece in which the reader can see anf feel your pain. really liked the twist at the end
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....Broken angel ... You're not her anymore...
Broken angel ... my broken angel...
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Ah..the story is teaful..and the emotions are also vey hearfelt..touching piece...well done..and thanks for sharing it...
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This poem was absolutely beautiful. It spoke to me loud and clear...I can heavily relate to it. You are a very talented writer! Thank you for sharing part of your soul with us.
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So gather your courage
And hold close your heart.
Forget the past behind
And make a brand new start.
Easier said than done as so many know....Thank you for entering the contest and good luck!! Great write -
Your emotions are strong and powerful in your writing. I understand this deep depression as I have battled with it myself. I am thankful for finding the strength to battle it.
excellent, thank you for sharing, and congratulations on the Gold ~CC~
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You write from the heart honey
You have penned a poem here that sure is the very depths of what one should so when they feel their is nothing left . It is truly a gold write indeed . MAY i put the link to this poem on my page for others on my favorites to reads .It could help so many find their way as you have .
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I love everything about this poem, the flow the rythm, everything ^.^ This has go to be one of the best poems i have ever read! I can feel the emotion of everything you have accomplished, and im very proud of you! keep it up, just plain amazing!
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thank you so much for your kind words; i truly appreciate them xxx
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well.. wow.. its so desperate.. this broken angel and she recovers poetically.. you have wonderful talent and this flowed so gracefully..
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thank you very much for the comment i am in the process of setting music to this, so can only hope that the music will move with the words - fingers crossed
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Deeply awesomely personal
Hey Symph... First welcome back... secondly it is an amazing start. I agree with the message here more any most. Always striving for personal betterment in spite, and not because of, the pressures of the world is an amazing and hard to find atribute. If i was single i'd be calling lol!
This verse stood out for me the most: "
Escape the lonely life
And the troubles darkness brings
Lift your eyes up on high
And flap those virgin wings "
This idea of self will and self love is almost lost on most of the youth occupying ap sadly. I've almost always believed that if the mind is a bunch of paths... and depression is fallowing the beaten path of negitive thoughts... then forcing yourself to blazing those of optimizism would lead to a positive outlook and general happiness. You are a personification of hope and goodness since you've done this. I am so proud!
Bell well, seek peace,
Jason
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Okay.
This is probably the whole basis of the song. You did walk away form the situation and I am glad for you. I trust things may have been rough but in the end you won. Thanks you for entering. I had wanted the line Walking away a winner, walking away from a losing game, but I believe that you explained that in your authors notes.
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Ohh, my apologies! I misread the contest - because there were different options, I thought you wanted the theme to be walking away as a winner; I didnt realise it actually had to be a line in the poem. Doofus me =)
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