Creativity lies under my pillow,
swallowing empty thoughts,
because my soul was stained,
by your weary hands.
Lingering from molded barriers,
to facing concrete walls,
I find all this in question;
why have you clouded the game you couldn't forfeit?
Now you leave me,
with shadowed memories,
and broken resolutions
because you never learned,
to find your own way out.
~♥~
Author notes
used every word! hope you like!
XXVampireeyesXX
Would like to have a cousin !
Well this poem is my fave because my imagination did an amazing word with the word bank and I found this poem to be so incredible I couldn't even believe My mind had thought of it
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A contest entry
- Word Bank, Word Limit by piccola.
600 points, ended June 7, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
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415 points, ended June 18, 2008, 8 entries
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I m still on my way.....
u should have built a road to me......if u wished.......u ran backward in between........may be we would have found valleys of happiness together -
This is a poem I can keep coming back to, in hopes of discovering a little more insight into the author's mind. It's extremely well written, enigmatic, and beautiful. Also, the fact that it's a word bank poem further displays your creativity; you're justly proud of this one.
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Imagery is my favorite, and I got so much out of this.
Truly amazing
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Very beautiful write...love it, great job.
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Wow, I liked this so much, I was surprised to find out it was a word bank poem! It takes a lot of talent to turn a word bank into a really great piece that can be appreciated without knowing it came from a word bank, and you definitley accomplished it!! Great job, I can see why it won two trophies. I love the ending, it really makes the piece linger in my mind. Thanks for entering and letting me read this!
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Wow. I really loved this despite my taste for long poems. This hit me like a train impact across my back. The emotions in this piece possessed me for quite a while there. Very, very, VERY well done. Good luck in the contests.
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wow - I would have never guessed this was written from a word bank! Great job!
Love the emotion and depth in this. Especially like,
'Creativity lies under my pillow,
swallowing empty thoughts'
very well done! Congrats on the trophies.
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Writing from a word bank made you better? That statement resounds of a lack of creativity. Do you realize you have merely plejurized the dictionary?
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Excellent job with this one.
the depth was gripping.
Delila
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Welcome cousin!!!
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Excellent job. This is an incredible poem. Very sharp and piercing.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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this is such an amazing write that is written with strong and beautiful description. i love the detail and how you used the ord bank. well done
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I never would have guessed this came from a word bank. It just rolled off the tongue and seemed so well done that I thought you pondered long and hard on every word. That's my girl LOL! Wonderful write
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sure that every word has make this poem wonderful. it is great.
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Those are some strong emotions there and the imagery is just wonderful! I love how the poem flows so easily, not going too deep but still deep enough to matter. Very well written! ^_^
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Excellent poem flowing with lots of emotion beautiful
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This poem was excellent. Very touching an emotional and I can relate on so many levels. Thanks for sharing!
Lauren
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I really enjoyed reading this piece.
It is very eloquently written
with excellent use of language.
"why have you clouded the game you couldn't forfeit?"
Very good!
But I do think it was a bit over-punctuated - not every line needs a comma or a ; at the end of it.
Like in the lines:
"because my soul was stained,
by your weary hands."
Congrats on your trophies
-- Jojo x sinnocence -
taiinfinite
like this very much;clouded the game you cdnt forfeit
love this line gret write
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Very beautiful imagery, love the way you start it... it reminds me so much of a song I know, but can't think which one
"now you leave me
with shadow memories"
I can only speak for myself but I know I can relate to someone leaving me in that state, sure many others can as well. x
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congrats on the nomination......! its welll deserved your one awesome poet and one wonderful person.. and a great sis..... thanks for all you do..... keep your head held high hun..... we all love you....!
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This is a very direct and confrontational poem. I think that you did a great job of expressing yourself. Congratulations on the two HMs.
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Wow. I love the words and the way they go with the pic; I love the eloquencey of your flow. You deserved every trophy. Great write!
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Wow, what a great write and I love
the way that you put this together.
Wonderful work here and congratulations
to you on your two trophies! Keep up
the wonderful work here and thanks for
sharing this with us all!
Jeremy0826
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You did a wonderful job with the wordbank, sweet daughter...
This was a real remarkable piece...It was very moving, with the tragic heartbreak and sadness it showered out of your imagery...
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You have been nominated for our group!
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I agree, eloquent. Again, darkness runs through this. I like your image. This piece is quite sad too. Keep writing, you have much talent.
Darkest
Wishes
Wayne Leon
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Very eloquent.
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Creativity lies under my pillow,
swallowing empty thoughts,
because my soul was stained,
by your weary hands.
Lingering from molded barriers,
to facing concrete walls,
I find all this in question;
why have you clouded the game you couldn't forfeit?
Great poem!!
Keep on writing.
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Good stuff, well done, it seems your trophy cupboard has filled since I was last here. Congrats...ian.
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A very thought provoking write. It can be viewed from the readers own perspective and digested individually. It doesn't tell us exactly what to think but it prompts vivid images that we can take on from our own frame of reference. I like that.
Thanks for your entry -
very good write and i wish you good luck
thanks for joinging my contest
its a point forwarding contest
whoever get the gold trophy please open the same contest
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wow i like this... beautifuly sad ..... great job thanks for sharing this with us... congrats on the hm altho in my eyes its another one that should have done better...!
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Wow what a very thought provoking write. Such vivid imagery and emotion. I so enjoyed reading.
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I love it! also I love the presentation. The background and the graphic. The poem is great too. Unless I miscount though it has 60 words ( I used my word counter too, just in case.) Plenty of time to edit, unless I am wrong.
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