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Sensual Seduction

Your sensual elegance graceful allure
like mirror smooth surface ripples
rolling across silent still waters,
beckoning distant shorelines
into your liquid depths.

Seduction gracefully subtle
enticing passions rising heat
with inveigled provocations hungry fire,
you devour inhibitions
evoking sweltering heat
exuding lust lubricious flavors
from bodies every pore.

You draw me in every time,
your seemingly innocent demure.
Our slippery bodies entwined
ecstasies breathless sweat
slumbering euphoria.

Author notes

Prompt:
Poetry inspired by Rebecca Lu Kiernan's "This"










This


This is indigo paisley taffeta
Against chessboard pattern corduroy,
Pink and gold confetti
Raining down an abandoned street,
A curtain of glow-in-the-dark lavender beads
Opening to a crystal cathedral.

This is what it is like
To come with
You,
Impossible, ridiculous,
Enemy Divine.

Oh, the tricks and tools I used with others,
Red see-through baby doll nightie,
Black fishnet thigh highs,
Cuffs and nipple clamps.

Now the only things that vibrate
Are your wet fingers trembling on my ribs,
The howl of your name in my throat.








-Rebecca Lu Kiernan

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  • AJ Morelli gold member
    June 25, 2008

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    the first line of a poem is often the only one you have to gain a readers attention,

    "Your sensual elegance graceful allure"

    ain't gonna do it, are you missing a comma in there or am i missing something myself, it doesn't read well...

    either the still waters surface is mirror smooth or it has ripples, it can't be both...

    "with inveigled provocations hungry fire" is another adjective heavy, confused line, should there be an apostrophe in "provocation's"...

    there is a lot to work with here and i can see your intentions but you need to keep after this one...



    al


  • Nature Song silver member
    June 5, 2008

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    'evoking sweltering heat
    exuding lust lubricious flavors'

    Lucious lips, bodies entwined! A tango for two..upon a moonlit night! Very soft and sensual write my friend! ~Sie


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    June 4, 2008

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    You did a wonderful interpretation of the prompt poem. I love the way your words just weave their way into the readers senses. Great job.. Good luck in the contest
    Love ya sexy
    Nor