I play to ponder.

I bleed emptiness without you

fingers

stroke keys,

violins soar

but will it bring you back?

Author notes

Prompt:
"My smile's an open wound without you...and my hands are tied to pages inked to bring you back." - Fall Out Boy
15 words

For anyone who's confused the fingers stroke keys, violins soar...is me referencing to an organ, with a violin sound if you know me you know I put the organ into my writes over anything heheh

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Abominangel.
June 6, 2008

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wonderful
so short and yet, so charged with meaning

the words you can chosen truely express your longing

i am a fan of this

xx
lizziepie
June 5, 2008

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ooooohhh so powerful, so wonderful, what a delightful thought for anyone whos ever lost anyone, i bleed emptiness... such a great line... i kinda like the idea of i bleed loneliness too... that way for some reason it evokes the image of blood being smeared and im not sure why that is but i guess because loneliness is a human quality and emptiness is not necessarily contingent on the presence of a human
Poetdontknowit
June 5, 2008

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AWESOME
WONDERFULLY penned in such a few perfectly choice words. You did a fine job writing this masterpiece. I adore each and every word!!!!!
POETDONTKNOWIT
WRITING IT HER WAY
fortyninereasons
June 5, 2008

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great take on the prompt. I love the unique sounds an organ makes. Well done. Juls
sailor ptolema
June 5, 2008

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bravo!!
I like this, and totally understand the fingers stroke keys,....I play the piano, so I'm relatively familiar with the organ
- MaMa-2-be-Cindy
  June 5, 2008
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  thanks darl..I can play the piano but I prefer the organ and well owning an organ means I play it hehe
Cannonsfire
June 4, 2008
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I get it very nice take on it...Love, C
KayJay
June 4, 2008
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Wonderful take and lovely execution... lyrical and poignant... Well done...
Ken
kiwigirljacks
June 4, 2008
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Sigh.. beautifully done sis!!! Love your ANs too
Cerulean Sunrise
June 4, 2008
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I like it.
- MaMa-2-be-Cindy
  June 4, 2008
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  Thanks , good prompt
Weltt
June 4, 2008

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Hehe wonderful!! we went in kinda the same direction. Loved every part of this. Well done and best of luck!!
- MaMa-2-be-Cindy
  June 4, 2008
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  Cool, heading to yours now .Thank you
Weltt
June 4, 2008
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Best of luck!