Envelope my burdens
heavy upon my soul;
relinquish the tears
[of disdain]
epiphanies
renewing promise
Author notes
PROMPT:
Please let the picture stir Your rue...
Credit: Photobucket
OR
[Lyrics Line Prompt]
Your Prompt is: Lyrics Line Below:
~Bears heavy on my mind~
15 words of wonder
(used both prompts)
A contest entry
- - Speak to Me in 15 Words X - by Desire.
700 points, ended June 8, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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What a read! This is fantastic! I like the feel in this one!
renewing promise
some promises carry on, even when one is gone, I have learned...
Congrats on the HM!
and love
Nyetta
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: tears or promise
This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I did several times~ after inhaling Your words, I kept seeing words: donation plate...and seeing a plate of some sort being passed around and then...what looks like a baby put on this plate~
Noooooooooooooow when I am seeing this baby~ I'm trying to describe what I am seeing which somewhat makes sense- feels like a baby given up-or death which seems like while in utero- unfortunately like a miscarriage or abortion Just mentioning what I am seeing while reading Your words
Also~ words: Mourning- No- Pregnant- but seems like the emphasis I am getting trying to shake me to see is this baby is not forgotten~
and hearing word: Forgiveness with a question mark- Forgiveness?
Read words again and was getting phrase: Slap in the face ...Oy~ Seeing this baby on a plate again- something about 5- and word: Repent-
Hearing words: Archangel Azrael salvaged what was thrown away
Sorry
I am just passing on what I am seeing after reading Your words~ whether pertains
to You or someone You know Each time I read...
I kept getting the same image...
Hopefully that makes sense
Powerful images You have brought forth
These words grabbed and pulled~
Envelope my burdens
Beautiful Voice spoken~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Know this was a very good poem.
So very thought provoking in it's brevity
Splendidly done indeed
Tony
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Nicely done, was this a combination of the 2 prompts? I could see where it could be and I think that if it was you wove it together wonderfully. Best of luck to you
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