Wondering what life I would have
lived if you had not been there
If only I could peek
What would I have accomplished if Id
stayed in college and finish my degree
If only I could see
Wearing white walking with my father down the aisle
Holding my new born baby so tight
If only I could repeat
Standards set by someone else I must live up to
Looking at you... you're so carefree
If only that could be me
So many mistakes gone unnoticed
Somehow gone unpunished... but regret anyway
If only I could flee
All the choices that Ive made
have made me who I am today
Looking at myself in the mirror
Happiness emits from me
The land of "if only" is no place to be
A contest entry
- The Traveler What Trails Have You Burned In Your Life by storiesuntold.
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Comments
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Very nice. This reminds me of the way my mom probably feels. You might want to do some revising on the spelling though. Thanks for entering!
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Amazing message you have penned here. You said so much with so few words. What if's are something we all go through in our lives
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I had to take a look at this one. My interest was piqued by the same title I used when I first started posting my work here. I see that it has basically the same tenet as mine.... 'a plea to let me be me' so to speak. Other than a couple of minor typos I found the work to be a piece of thoughtful introspection. I wish you the best in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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If ..is a difficult condition......you brought it out very well..
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i always wonder the same thing what if.. but great write full of emotion!
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Excellent
If only's are really something when we look at our life's and hopefully learn from our mistakes. But then acceptance comes in as for you wouldn't be who you are today if you hadn't been or done or had different circumtances and situations and choices we've all made in our life's, becoming the person we are today. Many of times people become much healthier and loving people by learning from their mistakes. I think we all feel a bit this way!! Excellent poem.
Much Love
Your AP Mom
Kelle Marie
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I agree that regrets aren't the best yet they serve to remind us of what NOT to do sometimes. I can relate so well with this write. Good job.
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Outstanding!
A message many can relate to! Love the way you went from the what ifs to the here and now and made sense of the road you chose. Excellent job. Don
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Very good
Indeed if only we could see yet if we could their wouldnt be as much excitment in our lives also maybe we could not have the sorrows we experience
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On the second line, I think it might work better tense-wise if you changed "live" to "lived."
Oh, and you typed "regreat," but I think you meant "regret."
Wow... when reading this, I thought I could predict how it would end. The last stanza, however, took me by surprise. I liked it. It suddenly became optimistic!
The repetitive format of you visiting the past also worked very nicely. Splendid write!
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