Hello there…
How are you?
“I don’t really know for sure”
Really, how can that be?
“Honestly?”
No—lie to me…
(Laughs…) “I can’t put my finger on it;
I was great earlier; then—poof!”
Interesting…what happened?
“Hahaha, let me see; could it be,
That I’m scared of me?”
Well, anything’s possible.
Where are you going with this though?
“Below…”
Huh?!
“You know…below the surface;
Try to ‘unearth this’.”
But aren’t we all surrounded by ebbs and flowz?
“Well, I’m impressed with how
Your talent showz”
Trust me, there are days
When I wonder where my
‘Talent’ goes…
“What about your black & white drawings?”
“I love how it
Feels.”
It fills my pages and lets
My mind roam
“(lol) Yeah, then you return
Home…”
Sure, but I prefer how you move;
You’re all over it when you’re in the groove.
I admire your smooth
Writing and devotion
“Thanks, it’s my new approach:
‘Poetry-in-lotion’…lol. “
Author notes
Hey, I realize this one might be a bit 'out there' but what the heck...imagination is the food of poets, huh? lol... Just a thought on my mind; how often we all affect each other...compliment each other. Thanks for your visit here.
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loool
this is so sweet and funny lool..you had me laughing
very nice!i enjoyed it very much indeed. the way you spoke to your self made me laugh(giggling)well don my friend...
juliet
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Thanks again for this reading. Now I'm smiling - 3 in a row, huh? lol... I am happy that this brought some laughs your way; that's nice to know. I can't wait to read from your pages. Glad my 'little experiment' worked out.
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This is quite different! I often speak very intently to myself but I don't think I've ever written that conversation out. LOL I like what you've done here poet. Very impressionable! Self-discovery is very important in our quest for understanding and growth! Excellent!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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LOL...thank you so much sis... I was just experimenting here. Funny enough, I have often wondered 'how' people talk to themselves. Outside of this fictious piece, I have tried it before and just felt silly at the attempt. But apparently it really works for a lot of people (that I work with and know). hmmmm? Nevertheless, what a wonderful comment you've given me here. I apologize for not visiting lately. I haven't been doing any reading or writing here except for the story that Swan and I are working on...been soooo busy. But in a few more days, I'll be on to pay you some overdue visits (God-willing).
AsIThink...
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Very Good
I love imagination. It is the framework by which all our thoughts come about. Well done.
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Thank you so very much for this wonderful feedback. Sorry that I missed it. I have only been on to work on my story ("Fantastic Lore" with my brother 'Swangrnv')... I will be back more regularly shortly. I'm happy that you liked this one. I never thought it would get this kind of feedback honestly.
AsIThink...
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I liked this, it reminds me a lot of the moments I find myself talking to myself or thinking about random things so I thought it was a great concept for a poem. I loved the way you have experimented here and admire that a lot. This made me smile so thanks for sharing. x
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Thank you very much for this wonderful feedback. First I thought it was a little 'over-the-top'; then I giggled and thought, "Heck, why not?"...haha. Then I found that some people ended up saying nice remarks like these ones of yours. I really appreciate this and so glad it made you smile. You are very welcomed.
AsIThink...
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This was very interesting...I loved it...Its very differen't I haven't seen any poem where its a conversation with ones self...very cool concept!
-Victoria
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I really appreciate your comments here. Yeah, I keep experimenting; trying things out. This sprung from ideas I have been having about different ways I'm writing believe it or not. So I then figured I would do a conversation-type of piece. Glad to see how you felt about it. Thank you very much Misery (by the way, everyone loves company...hahaha) - [uh, sorry, couldn't miss that one].
AsIThink...
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I could relate to this easilyl.....
we sit down at the computer and see a prompt...and
think hmmmmm....dig deep...what do we have here...hmmmm...
i typically freewrite...i let it all flow out and then
go back and see what simile's or metaphors speak to me,
or surprise me!
a poem we could all relate to!
well done!
ears/Seattle
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Thanks for joining me, myself and asIthink in the park...lol. Yeah, I kind of write what comes to my mind (which reminds me, I'll send you a link to something I'm constructing today - only in my head so far...haha). I appreciate this wonderful visit and your feedback.
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Hello.
I can appreciate a write with just dialog in it, having done it myself a few times. Nothing wrong with talking to yourself, good company, and if you can't enjoy your own company, and appreciate yourself..........Just don't end up like Fight Club, hahaha.
It's a bit abstract though, searching for a point that you are trying to make, but the essence of this can only mean due to its abstract nature that I am to find my own. That's not a good or a bad thing, just an observation. I wish you well on your voyage of self-discovery.
My regards.
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Thank you very much for this nice comment. In part (anyway), I was just experimenting. I actually don't know how to talk to myself (rather, I tried a few times-sort of like thinking out loud). It felt silly to me. Contrasted with this poem, I had been curious about where I could go with something like this; as I said "experimenting". No, no "Fight Club" or any other club like that (lol).
I think that you are on the right track with you observed, "...searching for a point that you are trying to make, but...I am to find my own." Isn't that how so much of life and poetry's meanings are arrived at. We both might marvel at a painting or a sunrise and come to completing different emotions and thoughts about it.
Thanks for the reading this piece and the well-wishes.
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I like the way this is a poem addressed to yourself, instead of being to other people, it another one of your poem with only 'dialog' I remember I once mentioned my story with only dialog but I haven;t been able to find it. Boo hoo.
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Thanks so much. This is the same piece you commented on before. I really hope you can find that story one day. I would love to read it. Don't cry though; you can always write another (afterall, you are a poet-'write'? lol)
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HEY THERE BIG BRO, DON'T BE SHOCKED OR SAY SOME CRAZY REMARK.....THIS IS A UP'S FOR SOOOO MANY OF US WHO HAVE TO FIRST LOOK,DEAL,AND ADMIT THE TRUTH TO ONES- SELF BEFORE THE MIRROR.THIS IS CERTAINLY ME AS WELL...ALTHOUGH I'M NOT FANCY WITH THE COMPUTER LINGO-I DO LOVE THIS,OH AND YOU OF COURSE...SMOOCHES.A.M.W-TOWNS;SOMESTIMES I EVEN FORGET MY MARRIED NAME(SMILE)
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Well, well, well...good to see you online lady (lol). Thanks for the wonderful, thoughtful feedback here. I'm glad you found something reflective in it for you. For me, that's always a plus...'fancy' or non-fancy, it's great that you're on and exploring; lots of growth to be gained in exploration (God-willing). Hope to see you pass by here again soon.
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Well, personally I have 4 selves to chat with...me, myself and I and the evil twin inside me!
This was original and I enjoyed it. ***Pam***
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lol...4 huh? lol...thanks for this comment and the read. I appreciate the time you spent with this piece; glad you enjoyed it.
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‘Poetry-in-lotion’ very funny. This is an interesting and thoughtful piece. It's nice to see yourselves getting along so well. Mine fight all the time, it's not pretty. lol
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lol...a 'smart alexis', huh? lol...Yeah, we do great together (hahaha). Still, sometimes I give myself a piece of my mind. lol. Thank you for your thoughtful comments and this visit, M&M (i.e., "Marvelous Mallig" hahaha).
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Oh wow, really, really something, I love the originality of this piece. A poem made up of conversation only, you know, I once wrote a short story with only dialouge, of course no one would publish something like that but it was fun. Great poem, you should do more like this one, maybe make a whole book just of dialouges between these two people.
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Hello there; I've missed you and your wonderful comments. Yeah, funny enough, I literally was just adding a new title to my "lists" called, 'Self-Discover-Me'. This comment showed up as I pressed, "submit"...hmmmm? lol. What a wonderfully clever idea. I just might do this. Thank you for it; and for this powerfully inspiring comment. I would like to read what you wrote (if you still have it)?
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Nice work on this Randy! I liked the expression put into the work! You are one of the best!!
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Hey, thanks so much. Always good to see you in these parts Pat. Glad you liked this piece.
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Outstanding!
Last stanza, second line, should be 'groove' hon.
Other than that, this piece is outstanding! The rhythmic feel of this, compounded with the exceptional flow makes this a stand out piece! I often find myself having these kinds of conversations within my own head, so no its not 'out there', its In There. I really love how you got inspiration for this piece from writing an email, I noticed a lot of 'subject matter' in here, that was also in there.
Fan-freakin-tastic! Bravo! Keep that muse alive, for on your words she surely thrives!!
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Oh yeah...I fixed the typo...lol.
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Hey, I missed that typo...thanks. Well there is this hospital in MD called by many, "The Grove" lol... Thank you very much for your wonderfully rich comments. And bingo! I definately wasn't kidding when I realized in the email that I liked what I was inspired with at that time. So, I see you do "3 pointers"...lol. Definately the most self-reflective I've been in a while (lol).
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This piece amazed..
and dazed me. Or maybe I'm just crazy, cause your thoughts left me hazy. looks like you did it, the piece, the one, the self-reflection masterpiece by which I think all pieces will be measure by.(but that's just my 'unbiased opinion. ).
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lol...thanks a ton. Didn't think it would have this impact. Thanks goes to WiseWithWordz who encouraged me to keep this title. After naming it this, then I thought to myself: someone's going to think I'm losing it (lol) so I renamed it (and posted it initially with the new name "Poetic Friends In the Park" - which actually sounded dumb to me...lol). After reading this to him, he said "wow, it's you were talking to yourself)...blah, blah, blah...Thanks again.
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this is cool. i really like the concept of this write here. poetry-in-lotion....smooth! enjoyed this trip into your mind bro. keep it up!
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Hey, thanks a lot kid. I appreciate this visit and great comment. Come anytime...its free! lol...
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