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Death Wish List

I need to separate
Myself from the noose
I can't take anymore
Of my own self abuse

I have put myself down
I'm a fat ignorant bitch
There is something seriously wrong with me
Something more then a genetic glitch

I like to think of what is would be like
To slit my own wrist
But to be completely honest with you
That's at the bottom of my death wish list

There are so many horrible ideas
Flouting inside my head
No matter which one I choose
The outcome will always be dead

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  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    October 7

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    This had some real strong emotions. It was very moving. I found this really enjoyable too read. Keep up the amazing work. Thanks for entering and best of luck too you in the contest!


  • Fallen-Thumper
    July 5

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    really well written and holds alot of emotion. i really liked this piece and i can reate to it. a great write. good job. a very deep write.
    good luck and thanks for entering


  • Zia-
    June 18

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    wow

    i can kinda relate to this piece.. We all tend to question our selfworth @ sum point in our life.. very deep!
    Take care,
    Fouzia


  • Re-invention silver member
    June 8, 2008

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    wow... powrful... might want to change "dead"with "death" to make the ending more complete...
    great job!


  • crazymomma
    June 7, 2008

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    OMG! This was powerful and intense. Very sad though. It reminded me of my own childhood. The good news is life does get better. Lovely write.


  • Asylaarix
    June 4, 2008

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    I really like this ... it's hard to watch someone go through the same things I went through ... Or at least hear of someone who goes through the same things I went through ... I am fat, I cut, I feel, I heal ... it's the same thing over and over and over again ... it's hard ... I believe that to the fullest ... but things will in time get better for you ... I promise you that ...

    This piece is very emotional and very strong within it's words ... thank you for sharing your pain with us ... and know that if you EVER feel like you need to talk to someone ... I am here for you ... just message me ... and I will ALWAYS be here ...

    Love Always
    Chantelle


  • Devient
    June 4, 2008

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    Finally an original piece for this contest! thank you! . I like the raw anger and pain in this, and cutting does relieve pain well, though I am not advocating it. Weel written and well thought out, it speaks volumes in souch little space, short, sweet and to the point. Good job!

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