Yellow moon within night's womb,aura of succulent cream
Upon your ancient face does loom, a thousand bridled dreams~
They ride upon precariously, and latch onto your skin
And if fulfilled,miraculously,those dreams dig deep within~
Your craters and knolls, to them do lull, of you they are a part
They abide in in your very soul, you confide them to your heart~
They unite together,never to sever,those dreams become as one
They grow, then glow on out,from you my midnight sun~
But dreams by fate, that came too late,from you they found no care
They could not cling, you gave a fling,you cast them out to air~
Unfulfilled,those dreams you killed, you flung them out afar
But alas those dreams would not be still,and instead became a star~
Author notes
It is a Non Entry as I am co hosting this contest..
Image found at www.photobucket.com
Pic done by majdolinemoon
A contest entry
- HUGUENAUTIES CONTEST No #33 FOR MEMBERS OF HUGH WYLES' FAVOURITES GROUP ONLY by huguenauties.
750 points, ended June 24, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Oh my goodness... a fine example to follow and an inspiration to us all.
Well said, beautiful poetess! 
A poem of dreams.
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another wonderful entry...you and Hugh..both are host so they do not get judged but if they did you two would be in stiff compitition...just lovely...
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Wow, too bad you were cohosting because this is such a beautiful poem. And where did you get that picture? You have such lovely pictures to compliment your poetry. I would love to put something like this as my desktop!
Great poem
~Sarah
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wow!
this is stunning! i love this very much! the imagery was so powerful!
the flow was great! a beautiful write with a gorgeous abstract picture! amazing masterpiece you;ve created here!
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How do you think such wonderful thoughts? It's because you are superb with writing nature poems... and nature and dreams mix so well.
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Such beautiful expression about our dreams. I really like the ending 2 lines.
The picture is beautiful too!
Great job sis!
Jeannette
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This was amazing, truly a work of art!
Empath
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Sensational!!!! you always have such an elegant way with that quill of yours. This is stunning,
Best of luck in the contest.
Delila
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Excellent
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Very Beautiful Susan, You write such magnificent poems on nature, and the picture is beautiful.
Love Hine
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Dear Molly,
WOW!! This is a stunner! I can visualise the moon from your words even without the picture you posted with them.
As always, top marks for imagery and I agree with Maureen - it's a pity that, as contest host, yoiu had to make it a "Non-Entry".
Well done! Applause, love and hugs, XXX Hugh (R.)
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Dear Susan,
Beautifully written my sweet. Loved the imagery and the picture is absolutely beautiful.
Love Joan
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Very nicely done, Sis!
Too bad this is a Non-Entry, it is an excellent poem! Really nice pic', too!
Love,
Maureen
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This is just beautiful, Susan. You've created a poem even more beautiful than the image you posted with it, as wonderful imagery of your own casts it's spell on this piece.
I see you've posted as a non entry since you're the host of the sontest, but it could win a shiney trophy in any contest.
love and
Dee
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Gorgeous poem. I love the internal rhyme and the rhythm works well also. The flow is beautiful, as are the images you employ.
Couplet 3, line 2: You have "within in" together. I would nix the word "in" there.
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very nice
I love your imagery and imagination. Your rhyme is good as always. This is a nice fantasy/nature poem. -
Oooooooooooooh~
A Beautiful write Sis and Love the images also the energy You put forth in this verse
Magnificent one!!
Your words compliment the picture
Wahoooooooooooooo- Love the rhyme too
Keep that quill dancing~~
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Susan, again you have used your magic with words and written a very myth-like verse. Love how you took forsaken dreams and turned them into stars. Such positivity from a negative situation. Your rhyming couplets are perfect and not at all forced. Glad to see you co-hosting a contest! Hope you are feeling better now. I miss talking to you. Have not been so good myself. Call me when you have time.
Too bad this wasn't an entry. hehe It probably would have won!
Love,
your sis xoxo
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beautiful
Oh my sis this was great. Such wonderful words and so touching. Best of luck in the contest.
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Beautiful writing here. Very very mystical in nature. Deep writing that touches the heart and soul. I love the imagery that is displayed here. Well done.
With
Dark
Love
Wayne Leon
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Blushfulmoon
Ohhhh very beautiful You did a wonderful job with it Sis Good luck in the contest
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