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Light the way

As the world ebbs

from beneath my feet

Light the way to

my eternal retreat.

A contest entry

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  • Desire gold member
    June 8, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: Light the way
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I did several times~ after inhaling Your words, I kept hearing word: Artistic- but shown a painter's brush- and a canvas which is human skin-flesh~ (getting word: metaphor)
    Nowwwwwwwwwwww was getting phrase: Why You question the inevitable? kept hearing that~ also being shown a plane- commercial- reference to UPS~
    Strange as it may sound was seeing what looks like dirt underneath soil.... felt as if being buried- but reference to roots- now not seeing a casket....
    just the soil and roots- Hearing word: Eulogy- and also chicken scratch
    Hopefully that makes sense
    Powerful images You have brought forth

    These words grabbed and pulled~
    ...my eternal retreat.
    Beautiful Voice spoken~

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~



  • Justin
    June 5, 2008
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    Nicely written.... short, yet with a strong message to it. Very intriguing and well done!

    Thank you for sharing this piece with us. It was certainly a well done write. You seem to have a lot of talent... perhaps you should submit something into my contest? Ah, anyway.... uhm, welcome to All Poetry!

    • damajo
      June 5, 2008
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      Thank you!

      This is all new to me, but so far I'm really enjoying myself. I will be sure to enter one of your contests. Take care and again thank you.

  • JWGoethe
    June 4, 2008

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    Clever and intriguing. So few words can be read many ways, though. To me it suggests that light at the end of the tunnel (near death experience and all that) well done.


  • DrkPoet silver member
    June 4, 2008

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    I'm more than impressed with your use of the 15 words, it's an excellent take on the prompt and you definately suprised me with it. Best of luck in the contest.

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