I'm the kind of girl
Who smiles,
Because I feel like it;
Who's talks non-stop
About a boy
That's taught her happily ever after
Doesn't have to be stereotypical;
Who goes through books like paper
Because my reality is blurred;
The girl who writes like her heart beats
Because her stories are a reality
All in her mind;
The girl your mama warned you about
Because I'm sassy,
Sarcastic,
And couldn't really give a damn;
Who sometimes forgets to shave both legs
Because my attention span is that of a gold fish;
Who wants to pierce her lips,
Her eyebrow
But knows it would look fake;
Who wants to bleach her hair
So it can be the color of skittles;
I'm the girl who cries at night
Because for once,
I couldn't make everyone happy;
Who gives you the reality check
Because she couldn't pretend anymore.
Yeah,
Oh yeah,
I'm that girl.
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A contest entry
- "Teen Girl" Poetry ;) by NightshadeNymph.
600 points, ended May 22, 17 entries
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I enjoyed the voice of this poem, but it did not exactly fit the prompt of my contest. As a pre-write that is understandable. It is a teen girl poem, just not exactly what I was looking for, which was something making fun of teen girl poetry. I would read the contest a little bit more carefully next time, but thank you for entering.
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see, like this is a good example of one youve written that's really good and alot better than quite a few of the poems Ive written, good job Storm, it leaves me with a great feeling of optimisim, sorry I'm dyslexic and cant spell worth a crap
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darling, who didn't you make happy? you shouldn't let it get you down. you cant please everyone. no one can.
this poem is really good. you have always been really really good at everything. i still envy you.
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i like. i can relate to wanting to pierce yourself in ambitious ways but realizing it wouldn't look good; and the memory of a goldfish, hm..
well, never mind. i can't remember what i was talking about anyway
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This is a really great idea for a poem. i saw you mentioned it in your contest also, where did you get the idea from? im thinking about writing one myself!
ok constructive critisism, if i were to suggest a change it would be to use the third person and say "her" instead of "my" because it fits better. i dont know if thats for grammer reasons or what but my gut says its more right! My favorite part was defidently the end, very sassy. if it were my peice though it would sit on the page like this...just space it out a bit and end the verse after "competition" start a new paragraph and say
Who's the girl your mama warned you about?
Yea, i'm that girl.
Anyways, take it or leave it just thought i'd give you my two cents since you asked for it. LOL
i really do like the set up of the whole poem though, its simple but unfolds in a fun, revealing, and artistic way.
Sarah
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