Leaning Fountains and Sand Dolphins

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abstract landscapes and photos by me...
-created with the scenario editor program for Empire Earth II
(from which my Journey Through Middle Earth scenario will be published in an upcoming Gold Edition, no less...)

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  A. Lee S.
  January 27
  
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  A metaphoric medley...

  delicately, yet adamantly, juxtaposing landscapes of turmoil with brooding contemplation; concave architecture with convex socialism; despair with hope.
  
  It's wondrous visually and intellectually stimulating.
  
  Thanks for the re-read; I enjoyed it even more.
• A. Lee S.
  January 26
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  Bloody optimist...

  suggesting that the battle had been won
  by the ever-present, dormant, reborn
  hard to kill spirit of freedom...
  
  This was my fav:
  
  Upward, skyward buzzing, massed
  clustered, sneering slogans of death
  over fields of midsummer nights...
  
  very visual... ample room for a variety of interpretation... propaganda stifling dreams; facist dictator's trampling hope...
  
  But then what need would there be for hope without atrocity's pertinent bane?
  
  Bravo... cool pics, __.
  
  

  
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    wbiro
    January 27
    
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    thanks for the look- but a curse- I should be heading off to work (lucky I have my own hours), but you've spurred me to give this nascent piece a good going-over... and I did... and I'm glad I did, and I'm glad you did...
• RechercheCadaver
  December 23, 2008
  
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  Very imaginative and dynamic imagery, I love this sense of direction, a sense of moving along with the poem, especially here in this part: "Upward, skyward buzzing, massed
  clustered sneering
  over fields of midsummer nights" There is an apocalyptic quality to this, reminds me of Orwell for some reason.
• • wbiro
    December 23, 2008
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    hey, thanks for the look and comment- I see the poem itself is still a little plain, and I fixed the very last line... (sometimes when we create, especially a large piece, we run out of energy, and things are left unpolished)... ahhhh, I know what it needs- a little assonant/consonant/alliterative beautification...
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  Joseph Hollis
  November 15, 2008
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  Abstract and Analog.It's like an alien transmission.The sand dolphins would approve.

  
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    wbiro
    November 15, 2008
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    thanks, still trying to make the writing a bit more poetic... difficult!
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      Joseph Hollis
      November 15, 2008
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      I think you've got "poetic" covered in your own unique style. It works.
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  FallingSideways
  October 2, 2008
  
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  I am a fan of ambiguity and metaphors; something for the mind to puzzle over...
  However, the images made me laugh, most likely due to their source.
  

  
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    wbiro
    October 2, 2008
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    thanks- other guys 'play' war games... I burned out and got creative, as you can see... lol
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      FallingSideways
      October 2, 2008
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      Ha, a creative soul indeed.
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  Wind 03
  August 14, 2008
  
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  woow

  as i read your work...you amaze me each time...brilliant!!! you are..keep up with the excellent work... )))
  
  hope reduced to despair, dust, death
  settling one step higher than where it began
  suggesting that a battle had been won
  by a new spirit of freedom...
  
  amazingggggggg

  
• wbiro
  June 14, 2008
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  thanks- and even though I chastize obscure metaphor, you can see I have no qualms about embracing it whenever, wherever...
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  Tangled Angle
  June 13, 2008
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  This is very cool. So much imagination put into this. Awesome.

  
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  SexyAngel0418
  June 6, 2008
  
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  wow... this is awesome!!! very attention catching and memorizing!!! You did a great job on this one...
  
  Hugs
  Beth
  
  PS I'm stopping by and reading a few!!!
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  Cannonsfire
  June 5, 2008
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  I think you are amazing! This is brilliant and so much work. Love, C

  
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  Darkend
  June 5, 2008
  
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  COOL

  This is the first poem i have ever seen like this. Very Unique. I loved the pictures, they add to the whole gradeur. Well done!
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  darell
  June 5, 2008
  
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  very nice

  a complicated piece of work written
  with great skill and talent.
  sorted images flash across the canvas
  in living colors of neon bright.
  A spectacle of mega proportions in
  the intergalactical odyssey of the mind.

  
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  frownsnfreckles
  June 5, 2008
  
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  An amazing piece of work! I didn't quite know what to make of it but was enthralled nonetheless by the surrealism of the visuals and then the drama of the written piece. The most creative page I have come across on 'allpoetry'

  
• TheDreamsMalfunction
  June 5, 2008
  
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  Your writing sparkles with the ornamentation of a long-lost age, a history we have shunned for the silver and chrome of the present. In essence, this is what the poem entails: nature destroyed by civilization, something made more effective by the pictures, but while they served as a fitting prologue and accompaniment to the piece, some might become discouraged at having to look at so many. Just a thought.
  
  I think this could be effective as well if it were sung... especially line 4... that pause between "lurking" and "brooding" says so much about how desire builds between the thought and the consequence.
  
  A revelatory and prophetic work. Great job!