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Into The Night





In the tranquil of twilight,
passionate thoughts beseech lips
to sigh as feathered softness
caresses heightened souls

our silhouettes embrace
between silken weaved moments,
sharing provocative secrets
for an escape into desires

enchanting syllables like these
come in starlit flutters,
entwining our essence
to rhythm as one

with the moon’s glow reflecting
within gazing eyes; our hearts imbibe love
as we tenderly whisper into sweet dreams~

 


Author notes

7. Write on the theme of "Pillow Talk"

pic: http://www.ballzbollywood.com/wp-content/uploads/2008/04/deepika-upen-patel-pictures-bed.jpg

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  • Errant Panther gold member
    June 10, 2008

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    beautiful and engaging imagery that blend well with the soft tone of words and the intimate image you provided. very well put together piece, though it is longer than the 15 line limit, I won't ask you to alter it as it would impede the flow.


    • jasminerose
      June 10, 2008
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      Thank you so much for the lovely compliment on my entry and I did however edit it to fit the rules(which I may add, am a stickler for but must have been daydreaming instead) my apologies
      It is also how I write sometimes.. splitting up complete sentences into 4 lines.. lol
      just my crazy pen doing its thing
      Thank you for hosting such a lovely inspiring contest and once again for the very lovely comment given
      Jazzy

  • mcfreeman
    June 8, 2008
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    Loved that first line


  • poppa
    June 7, 2008

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    Beautiful write....very sensual and just so soft ...love it ....wonderful write



    ps. great pic too....


    • jasminerose
      June 7, 2008
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      Thank you so very much for the lovely comment and I am glad to hear you also enjoyed the pic too
      Linda


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    June 6, 2008

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    Oh so romantic and lovely! This has a soft sensuality about it that captures desire and love at the same time. Beautifully done!

    • jasminerose
      June 7, 2008
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      Thank you Jackie for your beautiful compliments on my poem!!
      Always a pleasure to hear your thoughts on my poetry!!
      Linda


  • UrbaN PlaguE
    June 5, 2008

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    Woo. I'm liking this one. Especially since I like to "whisper sweet nothings" into my lover's ear. lol

    Outstanding write my friend.

    Josh

    • jasminerose
      June 7, 2008
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      LOL Hi Josh, Your secret is out!!!
      Thanks for the wonderful comment and giggles..lol
      I won't tell anyone
      Linda


  • Confusedboy
    June 5, 2008

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    pillow talk you have made into perfect loving moments of tenderness. Spoken sweetly with feelings of love and caring. It fills one`s heart with melodies of passion that caress the soul.

    • jasminerose
      June 7, 2008
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      Thank you once again for the very lovely comments you leave on my poetry!! I am so delighted that you enjoyed this write as I think pillow talk is most important in any relationship
      Always a pleasure to hear your thoughts!!
      Linda


  • poet2angels gold member
    June 4, 2008

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    Such beautiful words spoken in "pillow talk" so sweetly falling in whispers to the ears..
    Just gorgeous, Sis!

    Lynda

    • jasminerose
      June 7, 2008
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      Awwww Thank you my Sweet sister for the very lovely compliment!! You know how much your words always mean to me
      Jazzy


  • moonbumps silver member
    June 4, 2008
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    Heavenly blissful write-I am intoxicated.....
    xxx Hilly xxx

    • jasminerose
      June 7, 2008
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      I am so glad Hilly I could intoxicate you with my poem
      You should see when I write even more... well... ahem... I won't say
      Thank you my sweet friend for the lovely words of support!!
      Linda

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