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Shopping

My favorite place is at the mall
Where everything is new
I’ll purchase anything at all
That’s what I love to do
I love to shop and buy new clothes
I shop for perfume with my nose
I love to shop
I love to shop
I shop in stores until they close

My favorite place is at the mall
That’s where I strut my stuff
I shop all day and have a ball
And I can’t shop enough
I look so cute, the boys agree
And love it when they’re watching me
I look so cute
I look so cute
I wiggle my anatomy

My favorite place is at the mall
Where I can spend all day
When shopping I feel ten feet tall
Until I have to pay
A credit card is what I use
To pay for clothes and brand new shoes
A credit card
A credit card 
The plastic money I abuse

 

 

 

Author notes

 Prompt: "New"

Trijan Refrain:
The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different. The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:
Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c

Art Work by: eduardogarciag

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  • cricketjeff gold member
    June 15, 2008

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    Wonderfully lighthearted take on new, your rhyme and meter are as perfect as ever and yet again you walk off with our points. A pleasure doing business with you, lets see if someone can knock you off the top in Fantasy and the later rounds.
    Have fun
    Jeff and Sue


  • edgar allen matt
    June 9, 2008
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    ...god women are stupid


  • Kiran silver member
    June 6, 2008

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    I love this! Love shopping also. A brilliant poem full of fun.


  • Nangaleema
    June 5, 2008

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    this poem makes me happy - like shopping at he mall! I love this form for this subject matter, it felt just right.
    ...and about shopping - I love it too. A bit too much. I just need a shopping video game or a virtual somesuch so I can get all the satisfaction without the after-guilt.
    Great poem. - NANGALEEMA


  • echo-ink
    June 5, 2008

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    Amera

    If your name wasn't so unique, I would suggest your mom should have named you angel! You are a precious person. Thank you !!!


  • Aneka Bellingan
    June 5, 2008
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    I also love to shop. Ice cream, donuts and toys.


    • Amera gold member
      June 5, 2008
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      aww... thank you so much for the comment and the Bunnies. I can't wait until you write another poem. I send love from the United States.


  • Ithica silver member
    June 4, 2008

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    No more impromptu shopping sprees for me... I had to cut up all my credit cards to end that temptation... [frustration] Now I budget!!! Yuck! What a horrible word that is!!! But your poem is making my moo-la burn a hole in my pocket!!!


  • NeonRose
    June 4, 2008

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    Another new form here I see
    that you have penned with ease.
    You're simply great at poetry,
    and its intricacies.
    I love your writes, you weave each line
    in manner oh so smooth and fine.
    I love your writes!
    I love your writes!
    I'm glad you are a friend of mine.


    • Amera gold member
      June 4, 2008
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      LOL

      Thank you! hehe... A Trijan comment! The comments are better than the poem.


  • Pure Thought silver member
    June 4, 2008
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    New, chic, original, excellent

    nothing more need be said.


  • Faeryn
    June 4, 2008
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    Shopping is torture. Excellent poem though; it made me laugh
    Love,
    Tay


  • RedAquarius
    June 4, 2008

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    Cutesy. I got a chuckle out of it, as I knew such girls. Me, I'm not a shopper - the idea of a mall makes my hair stand on end. But this is fun, flouncy and frolicsome!


  • Poetry-and-rhyme
    June 4, 2008

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    this is something new to write about and in a well designed form the pic you chose is fabulous sis simply awesome

  • echo-ink
    June 4, 2008
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    I don't know the abc's

    (No pun intended) of this type of poetry, but I know a good poem when I see it, this was fun and funny,
    Yesirey, a good one, as always Amera. I'm still laughing, loved the anatomy line. Is your name Sara ?


  • Desire gold member
    June 4, 2008

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    Precious!!

    Now this is one Beautiful piece and I had to chuckle proudly at the images for I could see You strutting Your stuff You go girly!!~
    Another clever piece my Friend!!
    Love this~~
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • PerVirtuous
    June 4, 2008

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    This is very sweet and an excellent temprament for a Trijan Refrain. I am certain that Jeff is very pleased you entered his contest. This should do well.


  • The Poetic Angel
    June 4, 2008

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    lmao fantastik



    cheeky ~


  • myrataal silver member
    June 4, 2008

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    Ah ... It is wondrous to read this very cute poetry form!

    Well done Amera! I simply enjoy every poem by your pen.



    Love
    Myra


    • Amera gold member
      June 4, 2008
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      Thank you so much Myra. Comments from poets that I really admire make me feel wonderful.


  • Rovingone gold member
    June 4, 2008

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    Always so inventive and the picture is just right for the light hearted verse. I love the line, I look so cute, the boys agree, I love it when they're watching me, I look so cute, I look so cute, I wiggle my anatomy, what a flitatious little brat!

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