a discontented sigh
seeks it's way
to escape the confines
of my soul
as a darkness I
cannot seem
to run away from
trips me along
the path
I want to see
again the light
that was shining so
bright from your
eyes
but my own
have seemed to close
and I see only
my own pitiful sorrows
over nothing
trying to
drown me-
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Whoa!
At a loss for words... I'll have to come back to this.
Bookmarked!
I especially love the "trips me along the path" line.
Ok, I think I've got it. What I really appreciate is that even while you are down you refuse to quit... you're still heading forwards.
Thus, while the poem makes me feel empathy towards you at the same time I conjure a sense of admiration for your strength and am comforted because I know you will come through.
That is beautiful.
I read for the hope of things that might affect me so.
Ok... NOW I'm speechless!
Lol, Kj
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what, you speechless?
thanks for that .
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I deserve that. Lol
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bravo
A short but very potent piece of poetry here...pointed and poignant. I liked it a ton! bravo... bravo...
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this is really good thank you for sharing
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DEEP, MEANINGFUL, EXPRESSIVE
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and I see only
my own pitiful sorrows
over nothing
trying to
drown me-
Your words convey images that leave one in awe..You did an outstanding job with this....outstanding.
**Ktulu Blackwolfe**
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tesoro
darkness... tripping....
-sigh-
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baci
yeah, it's like that...
~sigh~
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