He stares when she's not looking
and crys when she's not there.
he swears he's not in love with her
and swears that life's not fair.
She dreams about him daily
and has nightmares when he's gone.
She swears love is an excuse for weakness
and thinks about him til dawn.
he walks around the school all day
with his heart pinned to his sleeve.
She brushes past him so closely
she can hear his brokenheart beat.
Their hearts:
-separated-
but beating as one.
Both tired and sad
of trying to win
what they don't realize they've already won.
Author notes
option 26. Seether- Broken
[option 2 or 5. I guess it could fit in either. 
]
This poem shocked me really. I guess it was almost like a kind of premonition for me or something. About a month or two after I wrote it, I found out I was in the same situation.
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This is simply beautiful.
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This is a great write. I like your take on the prompt. Thank you for putting why you chose the option you did. I am sorry to hear though that your situtation ended up being similar. Best of luck in the contest and in future writing. Have a Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year
Caity
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i really like the simple beauty in this piece, excellent
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I love this title. Nice piece.
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Wow, this is absoultely gorgeous. I love this so much. The end really brings it together perfectly! Amazing write!
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Wow, what a heartfelt write. You really capture the feelings of both the boy & the girl so well. This is such a wonderful write, truly moving. I think many people can relate to this - certainly, I can. Gosh, so weird that the same thing happened to you! Hope it all worked out well
Thanks for entering the contest!
♥ Peace -
Awesome write
So wonderful and sad at the same time you penned this from the heart and yes isnt it amazing how our hearts translated out our fingertips where you can see what it is feeling
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cheyenne honey that awesome! i love it!!! amazing.
-- love you,
tracie -
hehe i forgot my clappy guys
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wow this was realyyyyyyyyy good! =) one of my favorite parts was "he walks around the school all day, with his heart pinned on his sleeve. She brushes past him so closely, she can hear his broken heart beat." The entire poem was really good great write! =)
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I LOVE THISSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS
this line reminds me of me...
She swears love is an excuse for weakness
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Excellent!
Dude, this is so freakin' awesome!!! It's a cool poem with a lot of thought! Awesomeness!
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