Baby, come with me.
Let’s just run away.
Down beside the sea
Where the palm trees sway.
Baby, just us two.
Nothing in our way.
Babe, I will love you
Forever and a day.
You here in my arms.
Dancing in the sand.
I’ll keep you from harm
If you give me your hand.
I will hold you tight.
I won’t let you go.
You’re precious in my sight.
Babe, I love you so.
Where ever we may be.
On a mountain or the shore.
As long as you’re with me.
We’ll never want for more.
For I am heaven bound
When I look into your eyes.
No matter where I’m found.
I’m in paradise.
Author notes
option one
A contest entry
- Prewrite only by kitty23.
470 points, ended June 6, 2008, 68 entries
Silver trophy winner
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this somewhat sounds like a song !
"You’re precious in my sight.
Babe, I love you so." those lines are so sweet great job and thanks for entering
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Thank you for your lovely entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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beautiful write. this just made me smile. there really isint much i can criticize about either, lol.
my only reccomendations is to work around the grammer because i was'nt really sure how to read this. Also, when you used the word girl it kind of threw of the perfect romance... but other than that beautiful peice! I will be entering this in the finalists. if you decide to change this at all, message me with the tittle and I will be glad to relook over it. thanks for the great entry and good luck. -
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Wow...I am extremely jealous on the girl in this poem...And man who write you poetry is a mean you need to keep. Thank you so much for the entry and good luck!
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wow this poem is great
you must love this person tremendulously
very well written
i loved the line that say
"Where ever we may be.
On a mountain or the shore.
As long as you’re with me.
We’ll never want for more.
For I am heaven bound
When I look into your eyes.
No matter where I’m found.
I’m in paradise."
great write
thank you for entering my contest and sharing your poem with me and my co judges
keep up the great work
Kitty23
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cute
So, I don't normally go for rhyming poetry, but this one is so sweet...it's funny, there are so many single lines in this that if any guy, even my beau, said to me, I'd have to slap him, but when you string them together, it works so well...good job, and she's a lucky girl.
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