she kept honesty
in shoe boxes,
busying herself with
dreamless delusions
& trying to remember solitude
Author notes
Long, complicated and entirely simple.
A contest entry
- but my dad never loved me. by iverbthenoun.
1000 points, ended July 2, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Honesty would be lovely
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This is fantastic. Best of luck in the contest.
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whisper
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^ & here I thought you meant the poem.
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would i make that much sense?
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Beautiful.
You always manage to inspire me =] The title of this pice blew me away, as did the poem itself of course.
Short, simple in a complicated way. Bursting with imagery and words that make my jaw drop.
I love the lines :
busying herself with
dreamless delusions
Lovely.
Another beautiful piece.
LaurenLightning--x
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That very last word was as if you added another layer of depth to the peice. "Dreamless delusions" - you stalking me? lol. I love the complexity in this. There is a quote I remember, it goes like:
"Everything is more simple than you think, and more complex than you can imagine"
Which is always true. For me, atleast.
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I'm not sure about it...
Hell I'm not sure about any of my work lately.
It just doesn't seem to have any feeling to it.
Or if it does it feels removed.
Blegh. I want to write. The words are there in my head, but when I put them on paper they don't work. -
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It's just a phase. You still have excellent poetry - don't think that at all. It'll pass
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It better.
I use to get to the end of a poem I'd spent ages working on and be like "That's really nicely written, I like it". & now it's just meh.
BAH can't I have your talent for a couple of days? -
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My talent has been pretty rubbish lately. If I want to write with a penny of emotion, I have to go through chatlogs of insult to get it right.
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Pfft liar.
You're stunning, always will be.
I'll trade you
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oki dokie - lemme put my brain in the usb
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Don't do that.
It mucks up the computer.
I know... I tried XD -
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true true
bogus brains -
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wow I loved this, so simple yet perplexing in the mmind of the reader! Great work and good luck in the contest
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