I pity you because of your faith in me,
Despite my superb skills in the realm of failure,
With your mind resembling that of a dreamer's.
Hundreds of failures, why should here, now,, why should this time be different?
It's like dropping a stone ad hoping it will float instead of plummet.
A gamble is logical when the benefits out-weigh the risks.
What are the benefits? A few more years, I suppose.
What are, in this case, the drawbacks? Stress. Frustration. Anger. Longing.
I've been trying to make this decision based on these two factors for years,
But it's mathematically impossible.
There is no value given for x OR y.
Please tell me what you think
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this i really like, very honest and slightly unusual...
i like it ..
.pixi.
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the first thing i thought of when i read this, is a quote i found once by Jim Morrison. i wont quote it exactly because i'm too lazy to go find it
but anyway, it basically said that a good poem doesn't tell you how to feel or whatever, but it tics off thoughts linked to personal experience.
based upon that, this poem is definitely good. i love it. alot.
kinda like you (:
some of the phrases sound a bit busy or confusing-ish, but it still gets the point across.
though it's amazing now, if you went over and refined a bit, it'd only get better
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