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A Lovers Gift

Sliding sensuously

between beaded droplets

of quenched thirst

 

Eyes entwined

immersing slowly

into the lullaby

of spent passion

 

As the arrow

withdraws from

the sleekness

of the quiver

 

To the sweetness

of the embrace

while love pools mingle

to the rhythm of the

....Hearts 

 

 As one

 

 

 

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  • Ahhh Very nice! I found this to be quite a clever play on passion and endearment. Well spoken for intensity, and amorous effect. A lovely write indeed!

  • TAI

    Unlike the lady below Prof. Einstein believed that a little fiddle music was very conducive to the imagination!lol
    I have to hand it to anyone who can write of relationships and love. While they are not strangers to me, they are strangers to my poetry.
    Good going!

  • What a sensual piece you have penned here. As Angelflower said, the imagery is vivid and sensual. Good luck to you in the contest.


    • tainfinite silver member
      June 5
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      taiinfinite

      thankyou so much for your comment; sometimes things just all fall together and theres no need to try it just flows, doesnt happen enough lol
      • I know exactly what you mean. There is no stopping the flow and there is no need to fiddle with it either lol
  • I really liked this..
    You did a wonderful job..
    The flow was almost flawless..
    And the imagery? was really vivid and wonderfully sensual.. Thank you very much for sharing..
    Best of luck..

    Angel
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