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The Gilded Cage

 

 

Dog-eared half truths
Rearranged on the page,
Printed out to ensnare
Captivity in a gilded cage.

Pretty scrawling words,
Devoted memories of lies,
Locked up and hidden away
From the inner prying eyes.

Come closer and see,
The bitterness residing inside.
The echoes of fairyland'ish dreams,
Relentless and unwilling to confide.

Replace my heart for a book,
That shall never be read.
In a glass cabinet locked away,
With the trust long since dead.

 

 

Author notes

Ok then... Don't know how i wrote this but I did. I'm sure IfTomorrowNeverCame can explain it all better than I ever could. I swear she lives in my head.

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  • Unearthed-Angel
    June 15, 2008

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    This is indeed an interesting poem, but very well written Well done, hope to see more writes soon!
    Tam xx

  • tassietigermaniac
    June 14, 2008

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    Your timing is as bad as ever

    Brilliant poem, very well written, makes me think...

    Well, remember, you might not be with all your closest friends, but know there are those down here who care for you still

    Actually, i believe if you needed a shoulder, there would be a fight over who got the honours


    • Ravenblood
      June 14, 2008
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      o.O I hate to tell you but I seriously doubt there would be a fight over shoulders. And besides, thats the "warning: stay away" poem.. I think.

      And I'm sorry about the timing. I'll try to post a sad poem when your happy next time instead of when your sad. K?


  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    June 8, 2008

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    Interesting

    I got to be bruitally honest with ya sis I have no clue what to say and I don't just want to leave a comment saying I ditto what everyone else says. personally it sounds like someone is going through a life crisis and is trying to prioritize what is going on with life but then again to me it just seems as a simple matter in which maybe your own thoughts are consuming your very being. any ways good write this is and 3 clappys and Happy Birthday =)

  • lizziepie
    June 5, 2008

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    fun, its sorta got an alice in wonderlandish quality about it, i really like the last stanza, it just screams loneliness and emptiness and the inevitably of it all since we come into this world alone and we leave it alone and those are really the only two things we know about life for certain and you bring that to the piece which is great cuz it adds a certain depth good work and keep it uP!!


  • Girl With Guitar silver member
    June 4, 2008

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    fairyland'ish.

    And you're sounding isolated. Or at least, like that's what you want to be, or how you think others perceive you. To me, it's how you see your life set out to be, how others have arranged it for you.

    And I love you. Please don't ever forget that.


  • Dmonik
    June 4, 2008

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    Nicely written Claire-Anne.
    The word choice in this piece was exquisite. It brought this piece to life.
    Well written!

    'D'


  • demonic66
    June 4, 2008
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    nice


  • Lady Australis silver member
    June 4, 2008
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    lol she pronly does baby
    i love you , miss you

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