My mind is ragging
Like the deep blue sea
With my strongest and most nutritive thoughts
Struggling against silence.
“ I cannot sleep.”
The barriers of the unknown
I must face tomorrow .
Like the trees
“Striving in the wind”
I hunger in dismay .
To make it through the night,
While other bodies sleep.
I wait for the moon to fade.
Just to see if I will Prevail the day.
A contest entry
- PIF PICTURE CONTEST by penman.
625 points, ended June 5, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
do you have sleepless nights when things are not going right
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Yes!
This is a feeling I know well 'cause one of the illnesses I deal with is a Sleep Disorder!
Sometimes even though I take medicine for this I still can't sleep. It's times like this I really 
more fervently & just try to remind myself that He'll be with me through another day! Nice work poet. Glad you won a trophy 'cause you deserved one. 
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Very well written. congrats on honorable mention!
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Wonderful
Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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Interesting choice of words and metaphores. I like the hunger in dismy line, it particularly carries a feeling of deep anxiety. Hope the next day turned out alright.
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MOm this is wonderful
You did an awsome write Mom, This is wonderful I am so Happy to see you writing you will find it releases so much stress, you are doing so good! I love you so very much!!!!
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oh what a beautiful poem!
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I can relate.
I can relate to this because I have had those kind of nights myself and it is hard especially when you have a long day ahead of you. -
A very nice right. Heartfelt. Lovely depth of feeling. Very nice simile. Good imagery, flow and tone. Good word choice, nice alliteration and assonance. Best wishes in the contest.
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