The oceans play,
dancing along my soul.
While symphonic antipathy glistens,
from the moon goddess’ stanch eyes,
speaking volumes like an ancient lexis.
“We are the immortal,
watching your every wake,
from each cherubic star.
Shining through your penitence and bereavement,
relinquishing your suspicions.”
Author notes
(pick one or combine them)
the ocean
the moon
starlight
45 Words or less
A contest entry
- Favourite Things PIF by just mercedes.
1200 points, ended June 18, 2008, 9 entries
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Comments
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A nice write, with a very mythical feel to it. You combined all three prompts in a scene of surreal beauty - I felt challenged by /relinquishing your suspicions/
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A pretty write, I enjoyed it. I love the ocean, etc. I love nature in general. I think you did this justice. Short and powerful. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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