Within depths of love gone mad,
Came a prisoner of desire.
Eerie days of being sad
Filled her heart with fire.
Timid eyes and horrid cries
Erupt from deep within.
Some abuse mixed with lies
Keep the wounds wide open.
Crimson tears spun with fear,
Make a web a mess.
Kiss of death is real clear
And memories are now less.
In control he stole her soul
She no longer lives.
Beat by day he made his way,
Taking all she gives.
She hit the floor then shut the door,
Leaving him behind.
Open mouth he headed south,
He wouldn’t win this time.
He raped her once, then once before,
Now she’s had enough.
A busted lip, he lost his grip,
all she wants is love.
He did the crime one last time,
She is speaking out.
Through her cries he can’t deny,
What the screams about!
Clawing eyes behind disguise,
He is shown to all.
His dirty face speaks disgrace
As he slowly falls.
You are free to live and be,
A gem of a rarest kind;
For he is gone for doing wrong,
And strength within you shines.
Author notes
Abuse is wrong no matter who commits the act. Get help Get out...
A contest entry
- Rhyme and Flow part 3 New - 50,000 points series by cricketjeff.
4000 points, ended June 15, 2008, 51 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Great campaigning poetry, and very well expressed from one of APs greatest poets. Enjoy is not the right word for poetry of this sort buet we are both glad we have read it.
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wow, strong words here, with a strong message.
Whatever the abuse you should get help and get out.
Well done -
Good for you Tory. I love reading your work. Keep it up. Best of luck to you in all your future writes.
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YAY! This is Tory at her best showing the fighter she is! Wonderful.
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An awesome use of internal and in line rhyme, it flows well. The message is intense and enhanced by your word choice. Line 28 is a tad awkward/incomplete sounding, IMHO
but the meaning is clear. Best wishes in the comp!
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Wonderfully done honey. A strong message delivered with the infamous Tory punch. God had this poem ready for when it was needed. Love you baby...Scott
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lyrical
abuse is so wrong, that's hard to deny. it would be good to live in a world without it.
i agree with your sentiments but didn't really like the way this piece was written - mainly because it uses too many cliches and is so generic.but then again - it would probably make a good lyric for a song, because the language is very rhythmic and musical.
best wishes in your cause,
myron,
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Wow
Your amazing. The power behind your words s absolutely aw inspirering and strenghtening for someone who is being begged back into an abusive situation. And besides the sweet emotions it brings fourth, your poem is also exceptional in the entire rhyming scheme, i especially appreciate the rythm in most of the first lines. Your a poet at heart and I'm so honored to have come by this work today when i needed it. Thank you for sharing your talent and stregnth <3
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Get Out, And Get Help.
You are so right, and it takes a strong soul to be the inspiration for so many others who are still in need of help. I would surely say, listen to you, and heed Victoria's words. For here's a soul who truly has been there and cares for those in need. Thanks for sharing V~
Love yas, Timothy
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Thanks Timothy, and thanks for having so much faith in me lol..i have been there and i will be there for others. I have to. No one deserves the scars left by anothers hands.
I love you
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