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Griot's Tale





When we were young and sat at the storyteller’s feet,

wrinkled, sage, his words were already in our ears, and like

a magician, he pulled them out to show us how they gleamed.  

 

He told of a people who came untethered

from the ancient tree that grew them,
rolling like severed fruit without root across land and seas.

Boldly, lost seedlings took hold, growing strong in inhospitable soil,
until mahogany-eyed children perched on newly grown branches,
watching urban jungles devour the sons of kings.
And dreams were shattered, pieces of fate lay scattered

among denuded bones and mountains of untold stories,
praying to be sung, but left to rot in merciless sun,
as the ties that bound the people came undone.
Their wounds never healed from the bloodlines long severed,
and monstrous wrongs hid in shallow graves.

And the others were entertained by the frantic formations of a people divided,

colonized, proselytized, and so very tired of waiting to be saved
by a hero that never came. There was complicated shame.
They gave up hoping, and instead of changing, invested in coping,
and finding new villains to blame. They got so fat from being fed up,
they could no longer stand up.

Until they decided to go back to the beginning,
to the original meaning, and start a new translation of their history.
To stop parsing pebbles, waiting for reparations,
and recognize they were already the foundation stones for a nation.
Foes strained to hear each other over the bellowing sounds

of their respective pain, and the people reached on tiptoes
to peer over the battlements of righteousness

to realize their fight was not to avenge the past,
but to conquer the future, and travel forward leaving no one behind.
The formidable struggle would be to survive, build lives,
see beyond divides in tribes and religions, release hearts
from fearful prisons, unite factions in forceful peace,
and unleash potential in movement of thundering minds and feet.
At the end of the story, the people pressed each other to remember
they were one, and they were free.

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  • AsIThink
    June 11

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    Incredible...! You have penned an astounding piece of 'her stories'. It caught me in its talons and dug in skin that was leathered from lessons burnt in; intersecting at the grasses roots - back to the roots it is then. Love these lines: "They got so fat from being fed up,
    they could no longer stand up." Powerful skills there sis.


  • MariGoes gold member
    June 11

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    I have heard that you write very good stories (still need to visit you at SW), also that this post of yours was very good. Well, I can see that the two info were right. This is an excellent prose, not only the way it is written but specially the content. Your words made me think of past and present facts, which I believe was your intention, to connect both in similar situations.
    It worked very well! You came across with your point of view in the most wonderful way.
    Congratulations with the well deserved gold cup


  • Swangrnv
    June 10
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    ABSOLUTELY EXCELLENT!

    WOW, You're good! This is very inspiring and thought provoking!

  • Congratulations ...

    on the gold for these words that must find the ears to listen to them and eyes to read them over & over again. This was a talented write and well-shared. I enjoyed every thought that you shared and applaud you for a job well done. joy

  • BRILLIANT & POWERFUL!

    "Until they decided to go back to the beginning,
    to the original meaning, and start a new translation of their history."


    YES!

    You just made me stand to my feet. This so reminds me of my essay "No Offense Taken". We pressed on against all odds and created a culture within a culture. Tell the story baby. This is Griot, African Griot! You are a master storyteller with a spoken word flare! I am thoroughly impressed. I read this wondrous work aloud and the progression is stellar. By the end of this work I was shouting the word...FREE!

    Perfect!

    Thank you and I wish you the best in the Call Back!


    Much Love Always ♥

    Renee
  • OH WOW!  I am so moved by this. An amazing allegory, such depth, truth, and inspiration.


    to realize their fight was not to avenge the past,
    but to conquer the future

     

    There is such wisdom in those words, such resilience and determination.  I love it!  The ending of this, too, was so remarkable.  Those words, "they pressed each other to remember" --ooooh, so perfectly worded.  The signifigance of the lessons learned is powerfully pictured there!

     

    This is really something to be proud of, gal. 

     

     


  • secberm
    June 8

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    Yes, sistah! Dag... Where is this coming from? What books are you eating to spit all this back out? I need to dine at your house. This ramen just ain't cutting it any more. Write on, love.

    Dez


    • Mallig gold member
      June 8
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      Thanks! LOL I only eat books if they're about ramen. Or maybe peach cobbler... any food, really...

  • Peteskid gold member
    June 8

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    have to agree with the Lioness, something powerful has been recognized and stated in a wonderful strong poetic voice, wisdom comes to open eyes, understanding to hearts that will accept and give forgiveness; strength to those who will put aside the weaknes of division... remarkable work here...PK


  • My Nemesis
    June 8

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    This is great. I love the hope that is in your words. Reading it brought to mind Martin Luther King jr and his 'I Had A Dream' speech. I love the lines ' to realize their fight was not to avenge the past, but to conquer the future...' Those words are so powerful and freeing. Well done and best of luck in the contest.


    • Mallig gold member
      June 8
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      Thank you so much for reading, I really appreciate your kind words.
  • "Until they decided to go back to the beginning,
    to the original meaning, and start a new translation of their history."

    What a powerful write! We have come so far as a people. We need to see our history thru different eyes ... thru the eyes of our ancestors, rather than the eyes of those "who do not love our hands" (as was spoken by a character in 'Beloved'). As you say, we need to stop seeing our future-selves as victims ... but as builders, uniters, with a commitment to "unleash potential in movement of thundering minds and feet." This is what I wish for my descendants. Great write Mallig!

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