hidden in the grass
whispering sweet promises
-strawberry blossoms
Author notes
illustration:The Strawberry Fairy by Cicely Mary Baker
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A contest entry
- Haiku by azure85.
600 points, ended June 6, 2008, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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How lovely!
Now I want to eat sweet promises! I didn't know strawberries had blossoms! Thanks for this. I so enjoy reading Haiku that has it's intended purpose...that aha moment in the last line that compliments the preceding. Loved your fitting write that accompanies the perfect pix. Total delight.
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You've got a way with haikus, they're all very appaling, it's like reading a secretive fragment of soul. Great write!
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sweet
so many lovely images in this haiku - hidden, whispering, blossoms - almost about love. Very nice.
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"...almost about love." That was part of the idea...and all the wild straoberries that are blooming here now.
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I love wild strawberries. Lucky you.
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Nice work again DodFish!
I enjoyed this one and the picture. Now if only I had some strawberries. Keep it up my friend!!
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hidden in the grass
whispering sweet promises
-strawberry blossoms
This is very pretty and sweet, just what we think of as we see those blossoms. Thank you so much.
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The first line intrigues as it says something is hidden, the lush green of grass appears upon the mention of grass. The second line introduces a gentleness with the whispering and sweet
and the third line introduces taste,colour and fruitfulness within the strawberry and blossoms. A wonderful Haiku. Quite how you portray so much within seventeen syllables is a skill.
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Love haiku!!! Brill little gem here and the background really showcases your words.
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I like this Dogfish - has a feel of traditional haiku about it. I'm sure Basho is there listening to the whispers!
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cute
this is a cute 17 syllable poem which paints a nice little picture.
best of luck in the contest,
myron.
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