Watch as my blade slices through your skin
How can people believe that killing is a sin?
Watch as the blood pours out so swiftly
It can not hurt that much you little silly
Just one more slice, well make that two
I will pull your heart out before you can think of what to do
Silly boy, do you see how foolish it was to break her?
You will feel only her pain forever in life, you without her
Do you see your blood as it begins to leave you dry?
Darling I am her guardian, her demon in disguise!
So watch as my hand moves to gladly dive in
It feels good doesn't it, as my hand tortures you from within?
With one tug I shall pull out your heart with ease
Is it just me, or am I devious little tease?
Look at you, you have gone so pale and grown weak
Poor little baby, would you rather me be nice and sweet?
Oooh, your heart can still pump a cute little tune
So stop your cryng because I will not let you die so soon
True I am a demon but I can be an angel too my pet
The moment you shattered her heart your pathetic fate was set.
Author notes
Made with the help of Adrianne and Margarita
A contest entry
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450 points, ended June 24, 2008, 52 entries
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Isn't it beautiful?
Comments
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Haha this did make me laugh..with bitter resonance..sounds like you made a kill and did NOt tell me. So who was the fucker? lmao this is so dark and evil i LOVE it!
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yay! i found my favorite poem!!!
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Wow very interesting i like it alot its very very well written and worded so greatly. And plus you made the point that you were trying to make. Thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
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Thank you ^_^
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Holy f u c king shizer
*Speechless* But not really
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whoa.. O.O you're wicked talented, babe! =D
keep it up =) [like you seriously need me to tell you this.. -.- ^.^]
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That was really good.
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Well done, Wolf.
Nothing more to be said.
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HOLY SHIT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
THIS TOTALLY FUCKING ROCKS!!!!!!!!!! WHOOP WHOOP MY NEW HERO LADIES AND GENTALMEN!!!!!!!!!!!!
This rocks!! You werent kidding when you said it's awsome!!!!!!!!!!!! This is excellent. I am soooo envious. I wish I wrote this!!!! Gentalmen reading please read the following warning:
WARNING, WARNING: THE ABOVE POEM HAS BEEN WRITTEN FOR YOU. IT IS A WARNING. MESS WITH ROLINA AND WELL YOU READ IT.
What could have possibly motivated you to write something like this? I have no idea what it was but whatever it was , happen again b/c this is probally your best poem ever!!!!
Although, I spotted two mistakes. 1) Silly should be sissy. in like the fourth line. 2) the last line doesnt fit. "you wretch" it doesnt roll with the rest of the poem. otherwise THIS FUCKING ROCKS!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I have NO idea what made me write it though o.o It's weird
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You told me it was Funny T.T
XD Generally, though I was looking forward to the humor I was promised
, It was great! Your such an amazing rhymer xD I'm so jeleous. Though it sounds slightly like my RP charry's delema o.O
My favorites lines were so these ones:
"Just one more slice, well make that two
With one tug I shall pull out your heart with ease
Is it just me, or am I devious little tease?
Look at you, you have gone so pale and grown weak
Poor little baby, would you rather me be nice and sweet?"
Those lines were DELICiously morbid my dear.
I loved this, may even bookmark it. I dunno, the way you wrote it is mysterious, but almost discreetly sexy. Very nice.
Gorgeously morbid and beautiful Roli-poli, my dear! Great job!
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But it is funny!
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