See the other side reverse the same,
left is right in this wild tame.
Moving up an down making a face,
as the mirror matches up my pace.
Images come an go, captured by reflection.
Faces twist an pass a brutal introspection.
Peeking to the side, behind, to find my soul,
as the shiny glass mocks the fading goal.
Soon the comfort that the mirror used to give,
is sadness in my eyes and challenge as I live.
On the wall it sits quiet an never complains,
while I shake an try to get hold of my reins.
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Is the mirror me? did it see what I see?
Is it smart to know when the face isn't me?
Does it feel my pain when my hair is a mess?
when I pray does it get a part of my bless?
Is the mirror me? did it see what I see?
Is it smart to know when the face isn't me?
When I cry does it cry or know when I lie?
can it see my future in the tone of my sigh?
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I wonder if the girl in there is real to mention
living the same life in another dimension,
when she looks in our mirror the reflection is me,
and wonders if I'm real as what she can be.
The sun through the window blinds my eyes,
piercing the mirror, a flash in disguise.
Squinting a smile adjusts the glean in my stare.
I wonder, is she really aware?
Soon the comfort that the mirror used to give,
is sadness in my eyes and challenge as I live.
On the wall it sits quiet an never complains,
while I shake an try to get hold of my reins.
---Chorus---
Is the mirror me? did it see what I see?
Is it smart to know when the face isn't me?
When I cry does it cry or know when I lie?
can it see the future in the blink of my eye?
Is the mirror me? did it see what I see?
Is it smart to know when the face isn't me?
Shatter the mirror release vanity,
what was in the mirror is now free.
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Author notes
this is written in verse as song lyrics
Lyrics ©2008 by Elizabeth D a r k w e l l
Music ©2008 by Reflections in Black™
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A contest entry
- ♥Perfection - Mirror Image♥ by Asylaarix.
450 points, ended August 26, 2008, 18 entries
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you are near to me. thank you>>>
thank you for sharing this one! i hope to hear these words on the radio sometime soon! your writing could truly make a band become more than just a local one ya know! at least i hope you know without thinking you are "all of that" but you are
keep it up liz!
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The face we know better than any other is that in the mirror. This poem recognizes that we grant it personality, but through its questioning it challenges the idea that we know all there is to know about that personality.
I especially like the stanza that begins with the line, "I wonder if the girl in there is real to mention" There is a kind of quantum metaphysics regarding alternate reality in this that is fun to contemplate.
Note: The last word in line 12 looks like it should be 'reins' vs. 'reigns'. All initial words of sentences are capitalized except "the" in line 25.
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you're the best! thanxu
i made the changes plus i tried to do commas and periods better
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i found this too be a little to vague for the topic of the contest. i didnt realize i allowed pre-writes lol. i also felt that some of the rhymes were forced and didnt really get why sone words where were they were. perhaps you could tell me in what context this was written so i can know if it applies to the contest. thank you for your entry.
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hi what contest was it? you must have removed it? the song is about the reflection being as real as the real person reflecting like its another dimension and wondering if the reflection you see is the real person and if youre just the reflection and its also about how we perceive ourselfs.
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lol odd i clicked the 'next in contest' button and this popped up haha. its a contest called 'teenage years' but i dont see it on the page.. hmm
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lol awesome, my poems have the power to sneak in contests there not in
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AMAZING. =]Now i know what he's saying. wonderful song sweetie. Maybe i'll hear you perform your own songs someday. hehe. -
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2 words "too shy"
the only place i perform is the shower
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Oh My God! That ... was ... WOW!
I have no words ... this was awesome! I love it! I can hear it in my head, I can see the images ... this is ... Brilliant! Nothing short of perfect! I am in love with this piece! SO BOOKMARKING THIS!
Thank you so much for your entry in the contest ... GOOD LUCK!
Chantelle
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Bravo!
Superb, young poet. A lot of turmoil & anguish in this one. Very well done.
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Laughs is ajoyful manner
This reminds me of a place I've been to many times.
I like it I lIke it
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absolutely brilliant, nothing more i can say, superb flow, amazing insight, beautifully written, deep enough to understand and make you think.
Michael
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Wow. Amazing!
I can really relate to what you wrote. I've tried writing a few things about the introspection myself, but nothing as well expressed as what you've written here.
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