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Love #3

Love
all the world is staged
run rampant by the players
they smell good an remember your birthday
but to your heart they're the slayers

Love 
you make my heart sing
they smile warm an soon your theirs
tellin you secrets everybody knows
thinkin your the only one in there affairs

Love
you risk it all to find it
believe their words because they confirm your desires
then you leap to catch a part of heaven
leaping in fires

Love
you trusted them because you wanted it all
they count on this an walk away as you fall
still you wonder what did i do? i had him he was mine
so you think about a way to make up as you call

Love
is not always what you thought it would be
the one you chose has stolen your heart
returned it to you used and full of dirt
still you put it back an get ready for another start

Because we must have 
love

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  • sensualbutterfly
    July 22, 2008
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    I love how you compared love to a play and how true that is. Thank you so much for entering


  • TeenageTears
    July 16, 2008

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    This is so fucking true! Excuse my french lol.
    I really enjoyed this. Thank you so much for entering!


  • Sound of Madness
    July 9, 2008

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    Thanks for entering this into my contest. Nice use of repetition. Love means so many different things. I love love ha ha lol. I wish you much luck.


  • GypsyEyes
    July 3, 2008

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    i like how you repeated the word love. very emotional! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox


  • kel dog
    June 30, 2008
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    wow. it was amazing


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    June 28, 2008

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    Wow this is very good. All those things are because of a four letter word everyone needs but some how leaves them crying. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
    ..<3..
    Shelly


  • CharleeBoy
    June 26, 2008

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    you sent across a clear message: that love is basically something we can't live with or without. the last line, was the shortest of all.....but somehow it captured it all. well done.


  • InMyFlames
    June 21, 2008
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    there is a few errors that need fixing up so i suggest you hit the spell check.

    "Love
    is not always what you thouht it would be
    the one you chose has stolen your heart
    returned it to you used and full of dirt
    still you put it back an get ready for another start

    Because we must have
    love" this whole ending is fantastic, great job and thanks for entering


  • PoetryDove
    June 12, 2008

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    This was so pretty.

    Heartbreaking for me to read, though. Because my situation with "love" is at its breaking point and it's horrible.

    You start it out with such a strong stanza, it breaks down through the middle, and in the end it's strong again. Great way to do it.
    I really like this.

    "Because we must have
    love"

    Ugh...love.... lol

    It's definitely not what I thought it'd be.
    None the less, it's the exact opposite.

    Very good write.
    It's beautiful.

    Sincerely,
    dovey ~

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