You are my first:
my angel among a dark world,
my saving grace from shadowed existence,
and my baby girl.
I am young still,
trying to raise you the way I should
and hold you up and shield you.
This is my first time,
so I don't know much about this,
and I am praying I do right by you.
So with your first words,
could you answer me,
how am I doin?
Author notes
option 9 c
took it away from the song themes and wrote it from view of a new mother to her new born girl.
A contest entry
- 10 options for the creative poet (3) by bananasfoster42.
700 points, ended June 17, 2008, 34 entries
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Comments
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THIS IS SO COOL YOU ARE SUCH A GOOD POET KEEP IT UP!
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I liked the raw emotion that you put into this poem. The speaker seems desperate in the poem, and the shortness of the poem ensured that there were no extraneous words. The topic of the poem was unique- I haven't seen many poems about a mother speaking to her newborn. Thank you for sharing.
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this is short but packs power and feeling. i like the direction you took with the title. thanks for the entry!
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