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Why?

Sitting on the edge of my bed, I wipe fresh tears from my eyes.
Elbows on knees, I look down at my hand,
Watching the wrinkled picture blur as I shake.
Why?

I steady the picture, gripping the edges with both hands.
Tears are blurring my vision.
They fall from each eye as I blink; I hear them splash onto my hands.
Why?

As my eyes clear, my gaze falls to my wrists, scratched;
Red and blue; forming bruises.
Tears return at the throbbing pain…
Why?

I look at the steadied picture between my hands.
I remember the day; you and me; so in love.
We sat together smiling, holding each other in a tight embrace.
Why?

The pain between my legs increases; I caress the bruises on my arms.
My thoughts return to a burning question…
What changed?
Why?

I stand and stumble to the mirror; my naked reflection stares back;
Red and blue, scratched and bloodied.
I quiver at the sight; it hurts to breathe.
Why?

You said you loved me,
You said you’d wait.
I told you I wasn’t ready…
Why?

My heart seems to have stopped, my lungs have failed.
My knees grow weak; I fall to the floor;
I curl into a ball as sobs encase my body.
Why?

Our picture falls to the floor, and that is where it will stay;
To be stepped on, torn and crushed…
The way my heart and body remain.
Why?

Author notes

Heaven's not a place that you go when you die, it's the moment in life when you actually feel alive : Option 1

limechic - Live, laugh, love, & eventually cry

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  • XXWolfOfInsanityxX
    July 21, 2008
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    awwww Awesome poem I loved this good luck


  • Angelic Vampiress
    July 19, 2008

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    wow great poem I loved it good luck rose*


  • PsychoAnalysis
    July 16, 2008

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    This is an amazing poem. I ever so hope that this didn't honestly happen to you. No woman deserves this. All sick men like taht should be castrated...that's what I think. hey shouldn't walk away with a smug smile n their sick faces.
    Any way, good poem, and great expression of emotion.
    good luck in the contest!
    ~W.W~


  • PoetryDove
    July 9, 2008

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    Touchy, touchy subject.
    First of all, sorry you had to go through this.
    && I agree with XxshadowprincessxX, this poem made me feel like giving you a hug

    In this write, I saw confusion and felt anger, and a lot of sadness. Stuff like this definitely happens.
    No one should have to go through it, either.

    I like how you repeat the question "why?" so many times. You really want to know what had changed, why he couldn't have waited, and why did you have to go through shit like that.
    It's repetitive, in a good way.

    I looooovvvvveeeee the last stanza.
    "Our picture falls to the floor, and that is where it will stay;
    To be stepped on, torn and crushed…
    The way my heart and body remain.
    Why?"
    ~ to be stepped on, torn and crushed...
    the way my heart and body remain.
    BEAUTIFUL JOB!
    I think those last two lines really did a number on this poem, such a nice touch.

    Looks like you used spellcheck, or are just good at spelling, because I see no mistakes.
    Thanks for not using that FuNkY LetTeRrINg like that.
    && thanks for following the rules.

    I wish you luck in my contest,
    sincerely,
    dovey ~


  • Mistress Masquerade
    July 8, 2008

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    I like how you repeated why and added so much emphasis on the bruises and scratches. You tell the story with out coming right out and saying it which to me is important. Thank you for entering and good luck.


  • live-laugh-love
    July 8, 2008
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    awww
    thanx 4 entering


  • Puking Faerie Dust gold member
    June 30, 2008

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    Although the concept and subject of the poem is something I can relate to and is very sad and painful, I wish there would have been more imagery and metaphor. Thanks for entering
    Jeanette*~


  • borrowing.moonlight gold member
    June 30, 2008

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    omg....wow. that was really...really..amazing. i almost cried =\ wow
    thank you so much for the read


  • ProudMomma
    June 25, 2008

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    OMG WOW! I CANT EVEN COMMENT ON THIS BECAUSE I CANT FIND WORDS TO SAY THIS IS OMG ASTONISHING GREAT WORK GOLDS WELL DESERVED!!! KEEP ON PENNING

  • kales4
    June 18, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my contest. This is quite amamzing poem. I commend you for telling such a painful story and it is really a very good message. Great write and good luck


  • HiddenByTheDark
    June 16, 2008

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    AMAZING write im sorry you had to go through it just keep lookin forward and it will get better...
    ♥always Katie


  • unanswered
    June 14, 2008

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    This was filled with cuch emotion. It was raw and so intense. It was tragic. I really find myself speechless but in a good way. It was moving, the way one word can have such power, Why? Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.


  • TheGangstress
    June 14, 2008

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    This made me really sad. I know that's an understatement, but when I finished reading it, I just sad back in my chair, sighed, and felt really depressed.

    The power of such a single word. It's an amazing thing.

    It flowed very well, no grammatical or punctuation or spelling errors that I could see.

    Thank you for entering, and I wish you the best of luck in my contest. It was a pleasure reading your entry.


  • SuiCiDaLKiSs
    June 4, 2008
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    nice

    love reading this piece...good luck!


  • XxshadowprincessxX
    June 3, 2008

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    thats realy good sounds so sad... kinda made me wish i could give u a hug....not to sound stalker-ish or any thing


  • cursedwiththissoul
    June 3, 2008

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    Wow. This is awesome. So much anger, so much confusion, so much hurt, so much raw emotion in one poem. An amazing write from an amazing poet. I love the way you use repetition at the end of each verse. It emphasises just how lost and confused this person truly feels. However, I must express some concern as to what encouraged you to write this. By the sounds of it, you've been deeply hurt by someone who you once held close to your heart. I sincerely hope that you found someone to talk to about the situation and they helped you through it. Ten out of ten. X

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