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Haunted House

 

Step through the old door and feel the shivers creep.

Hollow faces twisting out of shadows so deep.

That close, yet distant past you desperately try to keep.


The Moon drifts through the curtain.

And faint piano keys chime.

You listen to the wind howl.

Watching Chandelier crystals dance along the blinds.


You take your first step.

And tiptoe silently up the stairs.

Your breath cuts off.

As you approach a freezing cold air.


You snap back to now

And continue down the hall

Echoes is all you can hear

Apart from the occasional screaming call


You're not sure where you're going

But you know it's what you have to do

What did seem several small steps,

Looking back now seems enormously more than  a few

 

 

The hall has swallowed you whole

 

Still, you carry on walking

 

Everything's come to a deafening stand still

 

Now you can't even hear the talking

 

 

You tap onto the door

 

It opens as if it knew

 

You take a shuddering breath

 

And creep on through

 

 

What you expected to see

 

Is deffinately not there at all

 

There is no monsters, ghosts

 

Or evil spirits standing tall

 

 

You scream at the object

 

Smashing it to pieces

 

Smiling happily

 

As it's glory quickly decreases

 

 

You creep back out

 

You creep spiralling down

 

Towards the light you came from

 

Blocking out that distant sound.

 

 

 

 

 








 

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  • DispondantTramp
    June 4, 2008

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    You got inspired, yay! The way you've lead it out makes it seem like the verses are different sizes when they're not, or is that just me, probably is. Hmm... the house represents something far different from a house me thinks. But I wont say what I think here for risk of sounding like an utter fool.

    Alara

    P.s. Have some claps for finding your muse, and to feed future muses, me and my muse are about to have a virtual make-out session, huzzah expect new things from me, and boy, you should comment on my shiz!


  • MyZeroForever
    June 3, 2008
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    whoaaa sweet hinnu-bun
    just like you
    my sexy bear