I would travel by land and ships,
A million miles,
For one small glimpse,
One tender smile.
If a tear should appear,
In your eye I know,
The sun would fade,
Nevermore to glow.
One smile from your lips,
Will bring a million ships.
Author notes
By ~ Maxboy
Background By ~ Little Feather
Silver,Bronze(2),HM,
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A contest entry
- Options, Options, Options and PW allowed! by PonyPride.
950 points, ended September 10, 34 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Silver trophy winner
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PLEASE COMMENT SO I CAN LEARN
Comments
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nice write i like that you put the bolder lettering my eyes are pretty bad. thanks for entering
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Thank you for the kind comment. I'm sorry to hear about your eyes, but to be honest, I was thinking of my own at the time. Have a nice 4th of July.
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this is great. written perfectly.
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Thank you so much for the Silver trophy, it meens a great deal to me. I am so pleased and excited. Thank You~Thank You
MAXBOY
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Thank you for the kind words.
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This is beatiful
i'm very emotional
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Thank you so much for your great comment and the applause. I'm very glad you liked it.
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Very nice poem here, I like it a lot. The ending ties it nicely together. Great work here, I dont even really have anything criticize.. darn, lol.
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!! WOW !!
Thank you so much for the Bronze Trophy, it does mean so much that you enjoyed my poem so much.
Thank You Again
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Thank you for the wonderful comment. Are you sure you tried hard enough to find something wrong?
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before i read this please enter your AN
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thank you for joining
this is my first contest
i wish i can handle it
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Thank you very much for the Bronze trophy. I really do appreciate it.
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Thank you, I understand.
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short and sweet, great poem! thanks for the entry!
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You are very welcome.
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Absolutely....wow
This poem really is beautiful. Usually when I comment, I try to pick out my favorite part, and with this poem I don't have one because each line is so beautiful. It made me feel like I was in a Julia Roberts movie
"Love is the answer, and you know that for sure; Love is a flower, you've got to let it grow."
-John Lennon
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If a tear should appear,
In your eye I know,
The sun would fade,
Nevermore to glow.
That's my favorite verse in the poem! This poem is totally awesome! I love the feeling that it has and the way that it has the ability to move someone. I hope to see more good poetry from you and to see you around. I always have contests going on, you should enter a poem sometime. I am pretty sure that you will win some!
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Thank you very much for the great comment. That is my favorite part as well. I am very happy you liked it. I will keep an eye out for your contests.
Thanks
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a good piece of poetry, nice and smiling with a positive way, aye, a smile can do a lot of things good if we allow it to.
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Thank You. I plan on making a few changes, to make it a sonnet, when the above contest is done.
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Very nice, I like the sincere heartfelt tone of this rhyme poem, has the feel of a sonnet; the words remind me of Gibran, simple words that say a lot...thank you for this fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging...PK
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Thank you very much for your great comment. It means a great deal to me, just starting with poetry. Thank you, also, for all the applause.
MAXBOY
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Learn what? hahaha I think you captured it. lol I see you are into smiles(here's a few)smile lol
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Thank you for the comment on Smiles Not Tears. Now, don't be blowing smoke. When I saw a contest on sonnets, I liked the sound of it. I looked it up in the dictionary, a poem of 14 lines. I liked the idea of it. Then I saw all the different types, then all the variations, then all the variations to all the rules and then I saw all the ABCs. Now, I am one confused puppy. I think I will just try 14 lines for awhile and see what happens.
Thanks for all the applause.
MAXBOY
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