Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

[ Sky Ripples ]

Sky Ripples
        ice-cream raindrops, fat, heavy
  fall -inexorable miracles slam
            agaist my wall.
The windowpane responds in kind,
whistles, when the faraway calls...
        I drift, like ships
with many sails
    into the wind while hails of heaven
patter.

A contest entry

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments


  • Polaja Greeters member
    June 5, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    I like the subtle rhyming in this piece... and the take on the prompt is different (and interesting)... I liked the form of this poem and the way that it flowed together - very much like water ... thank you for your entry in this contest!

    Keep writing

    Polly