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Every Word

Tell me all your lies,
whispered sweetly behind false eyes.
Holding all my life,
draining all my sympathy.
I wish that I cared about you.
I wish that your kisses were still sweet,
that your eyes still amazed me,
and your touch was more,
than the vomitous action it has become.
But they arn't.
Betrayal is such a strong action.
That is what you've done,
oh beautiful disaster of mine.
You have betrayed me.
Just like the rest of the locusts.
Now I leave you here,
broken, bleeding and dying as you are,
to ponder what you've done,
and to realize that while you always lied,
when I said "till death do us part",
I meant every word.

~Rose~

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  • hose30
    June 7

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    intensely profound.I thought your write brought some feeling from down deep. liked your comparison to locust.And your strong sense of passion for love and lif .You did an excellent job on this write.


  • first forgotten
    June 5

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    this is very sad, but i really draws you in! its intense and very powerfull, but you know i love your work.


  • XxemohatexX
    June 3

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    wow

    that was realy goo and i can feel the words like they are my own thoughts it great and i hope you keep writing