Obscurity falls,
around cherished moments,
as the moon towers,
our love blossoms.
Like the moon beams,
given to me in a dozen,
to show devotion and affection.
While the fireworks danced,
illuminating little hearts,
as they wander around our souls.
Author notes
1. BEST SUMMER MEMORY
ShadowsMidnightRose
17
I thought of the first summer my boyfriend gave me a dozen roses for the forth of July.
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Comments
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A short piece, but sweet and I liked the images in this. Lightning is beautiful, and I'm glad you used it in a love aspect. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Aww, how sweet. I am 38 and have only gotten roses three times in my life. I love the word choice and imagery in this poem
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