Innocent beauty,
fiery spirit,
essence of elegance,
outshines all,
which draws jealousy,
brings chaos;
Such beauty and soul
is like to a curse,but,
with pure heart,
prevails through all.
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A contest entry
- A Dash of Elegance by VoltaicHypnosis.
300 points, ended June 12, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
be specific!!!!!!! details!!!! thanks very much.
Comments
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This was really beautifully composed. Such wonderfull terminology and descriptions throughout along with the message conveyed of high beauty within itself. The last line was magnificantly incorporated. Excellent work!!
~Emily~ xx
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delicate yet powerful. Vivid imagery and intensely put - I offer no critisism, for this is beautiful. Good luck!
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I like it
For some reason it makes me imagine a horse or something of that sort.
Or maybe a human envying the free spirit of a horse, hence the jealousy and chaos.
I'm terrible with interpretations.
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I think i know what it is that kinda turns me off some of your work, there's nothing bad about it, infact it's usually very articulate and well written, I think it's too rigid though, mechanical in a way. It's hard for me to really explain it, when i read it, it seems to lack passion, or emotion, regardless of whats written.
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