Blossoms unfurl
revealing droplets
of delicate dew
upon this flower, fed
by my fluttering heart
when wind whirls your whispers
through my tresses
as the sunrise catches our gaze.
Senses swirling
as your scent lingers
in my garden;
petals scattered like memories
upon my pillow
as I awaken.
♥♥
~
Author notes
6. Word prompt (choose only one of the following words,
however do not use it in your poem or title) -
"Amorous"
A contest entry
- Various Prompts by Errant Panther.
460 points, ended June 13, 2008, 24 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Nice echo of the prompt without using it. The diction fits the level of "amorous" well, putting us in a slightly distanced, slightly elevated mood, appropriate to the images used. Nicely done.
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wow....there is something so breathtaking about this, but I can not quite put my finger on it, so it must be the entirety...words, presentation and metaphors. Great job sweetie and congratulations
xoxoxo
reenie
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wonderful piece, full of tenderness and romance. good use of alliteration and floral metaphors. leaves the heart feeling as though it has had a cleansing sigh.
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Another interesting poem. Nice write.
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A very beautiful and extremely sensual piece that makes the heart pound faster
Lovely in metaphor as these passionate desires are written so gracefully!!
Perfect my friend!!
All my best to you in the contest!
Jazzy
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How very beautiful this is, my sweet friend!
Sigh...
Just the way I feel about my special someone
Most awesome this is!
All the very best to you!
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Your dreams become a reality that escapes into your breath, your heart and then engraved upon your readers dreams. Beautifully done.
Love, Tom B.
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what a sweet luxurious poem....
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Lovely
The wonders of love and the after scent still delicious in our minds. Your poemexpresses love in such a wonderful and sweet way...May the wind whisper your name
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Whirling whicpers in seasoned feather...these words blow in wilder petal...the grace of angels...lovely..
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makes me want to bring 's to my loved one in the morning.
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