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On the verge of a storm


Scintillating stars,
summer nights softly shimmer;
lightning bolts flare.

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  • drakostheron
    August 5
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    Wow you get a lot of power across in just those few words nice work.

  • Everyone seems to cream themselfs when they read a haiku, good or bad they love it. They just annoy me i dont see why there so amazing.
    • ecrivain01 silver member
      June 7
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      Perhaps ...

      you're just superficial?

      If you are going to make a comment that's public, you might want to be sure that your English is correct. You meant "I don't see why they're so amazing". Also, it's "themselves", not "themselfs".


      • Ok mr perfect spelling, have it your way. Just remember when i take over the world everything will be spelt my way!

  • azure85 gold member
    June 6

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    Scintillating stars,
    summer nights softly shimmer;
    lightning bolts flare.

    Very nice use of alliteration, that paints a picture of a summer night with a good AHA moment in L3. Thank you so much.

  • God i hate haiku.
    • ecrivain01 silver member
      June 6
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      I don't write many haiku ...

      however I see nothing in such an innocuous type of poetry to inspire hatred.


  • I've tried haiku and mine always feel like my muse was constipated and then finally pooped something out. Tragic. I know. You, however, are most decidedly better than I. Your words move through me and remind me of my past growing up in florida and the summer nights spent on the beach in the rain. Now you don't provide a location with your haiku but that's what lends to it's amazingness (yes that's a word!). Any one can understand it and derive their own meaning.

  • Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh I love the background....... awesomeeeeeeeeee...

    I admire the seemingly simplicity of haiku.....because once, I tried to write one..... *smile*

    • ecrivain01 silver member
      June 3
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      Marvelous pictures.

      Thanks.
      • Yeah - the MSN homepage has Pictures of the Week every week, and also Pictures of the Month and they're often just...incredible. I advise you check them out every so often
  • Never a fan of haiku, but there always the exceptions...
    I like it and as haiku goes it is nice...and good word choice, which is the most important thing...but...yeah, to me, compared to other forms, it doesn't add up to much.

    Still - good job and good luck

    Let me see...

    if I can find you this picture...

    • ecrivain01 silver member
      June 3

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      Actually ...

      I vacillated between "shimmer" and "simmer", but decided to go with shimmer.

  • imahealer gold member
    June 3

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    Bravo to any poet who can master the haiku! Marvelous usage of alliteration in 6 words perfectly describing sitting on the lanai, sipping iced tea, and being chased inside by instantaneous summer storm, or background heat lightning. You could also interpret this as a couple enjoying the warm night, and words erupting into a storm of nasty words. Crafty.

    Linda

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