You don't remember this time?
The time of only yesterday?
I told you again and again
in that now forgotten time,
but you seem to not remember.
What would this mean
if I challenged you once more?
Is it even worth it?
Or do I just lie down
on this familiar floor?
And take the well-known torture
inside my tearing soul.
A contest entry
- Another Great Whine Out by pattyann4500.
1700 points, ended June 5, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Titles are a bit overrated (read as, I suck at thinking up titles) by Ilma.
1050 points, ended July 3, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - round one (for everyone) prewrite contest ENTER ENTER ENTER (AND YES THAT MEAN'S YOU too by serenity silvermoon.
927 points, ended February 16, 1509 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think? How can I improve? What was your least favorite part? Your favorite?
Comments
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Oh, my! This is quite heavy. A forgotten love perhaps, or just one that has been terribly ignored? I like the poem very much, but it's so very sad. You write dark very well. Thank you so much for entering this in my contest. Patricia
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